Abigail Nilem

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Name: Abigail Nilem
Pronounciation: Ab-e-gale Kneel-lem
Title: The Seal Master
Race: A special race of humans that have mastered the lost art of the Seal Master, a very difficult art to master, which requires skills in Alchemy, Clerical, Necromancy, Artistic, and Arithmetical. As well as these skills, you also require a very good memory, a memory good enough to remember how to draw out countless different Seals. There a very few Seal Masters left due to the difficulty of this profession, but the Nilem family have managed to teach each and every member of the family this art. Every member of the Nilem family have glowing silver eyes, including Abigail herself, these eyes show the hope that every Nilem family member have. The family also have either blue or platinum hair, with quite a fair skin complexion, neither tanned nor pale.
Gender: Female
Age: 17
DOB: 29th December

Appearence: Abigail managed to keep fit via regular running exercises as well as various muscular works such as weight lifting, so she is quite muscular. Her skin complexion is fair, she is neither tanned or pale. Her breasts are about 17 A

Her face is about 15 cms in lengh, 16cms wide. She has long blue hair that reaches down to her rear, she has a little fringe that only streches halfway down her forehead. Her eyes are quite big, about 4cms in lengh and 4cms wide, and the colour of her eyes are a dazzling silver, and her eyes often give off a feeling of hope. Her ears are 6cms big, but they do not have much distinctic features about them

Abigail is about 5ft 5 in height, and her weight is 8 stone 9. Abigail's legs make up about half of her body, and her waist lengh is 29 inches. She wears ages 14-15 clothing due to her small height. Her hand has Seals tattoed on both palms called the "Force Seals" (See Abilities Section for more details)

Attire: Abigail wears a white t-shirt with a dark purple leather jacket it over it with a brass zipper and two pockets on both sides 15cms under her armpits, which also have brass zippers. The arms of the jacket reach down to her elbows, and on the end of the jacket are cuffs which look like she's folded the jacket back, which consists of a slightly lighter purple. On her right arm is a bracelet which is made from steel and chained in circular loops, and attached to this bracelet is an Amethyst jewel, given to her by her grandfather as a good luck charm when she's away on a trip.

She wears black knee lengh shorts that are quite baggy. On them are four pockets, all with brass zip ups, on is at her sides, and the other's are on the front, just 10cms above the the short's bottum. She wears white trainers for easy movement, they are not made by any designer, that have black laces.

She wears a purple scarf around her neck, with both ends dangling behind her, both evenly leveled streching down to her knees. she wear's long white gloves that streches to her elbows.

Personality: Abigail is a kind, giving, and very thoughtful individual. She is in no way shy, and never hesitates to say Hello to a stranger, but if someone has hurt her or anyone she cares for, she will not hesitate to act as the avenger. Abigail wouldn't take a bad comment likely, if someone called her anything offensive, she would not hesitate to hit them with all her might. Abigail is not very good at telling when someone is lieing, so you'd hardly have to be a professional to lie to her, despite this though, she is very smart, and has a fantastic memory, remembering things that date back to when she was 2 years old.

First Impression: Once you hear she is a Seal Master, you would automatically think she is smart, unless you do not know what a Seal Master is. Due to her being quite outgoing she does not stutter, so no akwardness will be expected on first conversation. If you meet and greet her in a negative fashion, then chances are, you've blown any chance of being friends with her unless you have a good way of repenting yourself for it, if you are nice to her first time though, she will be loyal to you like a true friend.

Strengh: Despite having a discipline which is more often or not associated with a mage, it does not mean her strengh is anything to take likely. Abigail has focused on building her strengh for whenever she is by herself in a battle. The heaviest she can lift is 14KG. If she hit an enemy who had 500HP and minimal defence, she would probaly deal 45HP.

Speed: Though fast in the head, she is not very fast on her feet. She could probaly run at 20 miles per hour. Despite this, her attacks are quite fast, a throw of her chakram would probaly go 70 miles per hour. It would probaly take her 0.87 seconds to sidestep 4 feet from where she was.

Endurance: Abigail does not take kindly to being struck, a punch from someone quite muscular would probaly send her flying 5 feet. Abigail's fighting style is quite laid back, so she would probaly get tired 15 minutes into a fight. Once Abigail's run for about 9 minutes, she would begin getting tired.

Reflexes: As you could imagine, being hit while trying to focus on forming a Seal is very off putting, if hit, chances are Abigail will have trouble continueing with a Seal. Due to her slow speed, Abigail would not react very quickly to an attack. If a bullet was fired at her from a 10 feet distance, she would probaly dodge it by 9mm.

Fighting style: Though her punches hurt, Abigail will never enter a fight without her chakrams that she summons via the Seals on her hands. Abigail intends to save energy by fighting in quite a laid back style, though she does tend to fight in groups so all she has to do is focusing on forming Seals, when she is alone, she tends to hold both her chakrams in front of her, while standing with one leg back and the other forward so once hit, it is easier to maintain her balance. She throws her chakrams and uses her Seals to call them back, and once she throws one, she tends to jump back to maintain a distance between herself and the enemy, and if jumping back is out of the question, she'll side step, and if neither is in question, she quickly attempts the "La Boom" Seal which takes an offering of blood.

Weapons: Abigail's weapons are two chakrams that are actually a Seal ability. "Sol" on her right and "Lunar" on her left. Part of the "SunMoon" Seal. By tattoing the Seals on your palm, the weapons have bound themselves to you, and will come whenever summoned. Though not very often used because she is using other Seals, they are both very useful, especially when she is on her lonesome. Due to having the Seals on her palm, when she throws the chakrams, she can make both return to her palm.

Armour: Abigail does not wear armour. The closest thing she has to armour is her jacket.

Abilities/Seals:

Third Ear Seal: By quickly drawing out this Seal in a certain area, then forming the second part to this Seal at another area, Abigail will be able to hear anything that's happening where the first part of the seal is formed. (Both Seals take her about 30 seconds to form) (Seal Size 30 height 20cm width)
Nova Seal: Whenever Abigail forms this seal, she can summon 10 nova stars to come and strike her enemies. When she forms the Seal (Estimated 1 minute) she must then activate and release it (Estimated 10) The seal will glow and increase by size, the area around her will go dark, and then the 10 stars will come to strike the enemy. (Seal starting size 50cm height 50cm width, when it increases by size it is 300cm height 300cm width)
Sol Seal: This Seal unleashes a wave of fire around the seal which only travels 40 feet outside the Seal, (Anyone that is inside the seal at the time will be fine basically) This Seal takes about 2 minutes to form, and 2 seconds to activate and release. It's size is 200cm height by 200cm width
Explosive Seal: The Explosive Seal is quite small, and only sets off a very small explosion that sets of away from the User, the explosion is not very powerful, but good for getting rid of enemies. It is 20cm by height and 17cm by width, and it takes 25 seconds to form and not even a second to activate and release.
Le Boom Seal: This is basically, a much faster to use version fo the Explosive Seal. Basically, if the user simply dabs a bit of their blood somewhere while picturing the Explosive Seal in their head, the Seal will automatically form and can be used immediately. Due to this, it will take no longer than 2 seconds overall to use. In the past, this Seal has been used to explose enemies from the inside.
Sheild Seal: By forming this Seal (40cm by height and 40 cm by width) which takes about 1 minute to form and activate (no releasing due to it being non offensive) the seal will then attach to the user's palm, increase it's size to 100cm height and 100cm width and can be used as a shield for 3 minutes.
Quick Sand Seal: Once this seal has been formed, (30cm by height, 40 by width and takes 2 minutes to form) and activated and release (10 seconds) Anyone that the user is thinking about who is currently in sight, more versions of the seal will appears under them, and if they do not move from where they are in 1 second, the ground under them will consume them to neck height, and then the ground will return to normal
Wound Seal: By drawing this seal on the skin of someone, if there is a ripped piece of the flesh (ie cut) within the seal (which can be drawn at any size) the ripped skin will begin to seal and return to normal. This Seals takes about 30 seconds to activate)
Alchemy: Abigail needed to learn Alchemy in order to become a Seal Master. It is basically breaking something down and reconstructing it into something else. She did not take on much alchemy, all she learned was how to repair something that has been broken by forming a transmutation circle.

Magic: In order to take on the Seal Master disicipline, Abigail had to learn the basics of Elemental and Clerical magic, but she has never actually used these moves in battle, and perhaps never will unless it is needed for learning a new Seal.
Elemental:
Fireball: Abigail gathers her mana to her palm and reforms it into a small ball of flame, she then hurls it towards her enemy. This takes a bit of her mana.
Lightining Strike: Abigail sends a small chunk of mana into the sky, and that mana then comes back down as lightning that she strikes her enemy with. This a small bit of mana.
Clerical: All Abigail has actually learned from Clerical, is one, but pretty much the very most basic of being a Cleric, the power to heal thereselves or others.
Heal: This can help restore the stamina of someone if they are slightly out of breathe. If held up against ripped flesh, after about 1 minute of it, the rip will begin to seal. This costs some of her stamina, so therefore, the only useful thing for herself she can use this move for is to seal up her ripped flesh.


History: Abigail, as mentioned before, has came from a long line of Seal Masters, a very hard profession to take up, but her family is destined to end with herself soon. The reason for the Nilem family ending soon is that her mother and father have both mysteriously disapeared, presumed dead...Abigail herself is infertile...and her brother, Alberto Francesco Nilem, is now in the "Shinigami's claw" after his attempt at the the "La Grime Arte Seal" seal went horrible wrong...

Abigail now lives with her grandfather, Nero De Claperio Nilem, who is trying to investigat a Seal that could just rescue Alberto from the Shingami's claw..."The Seal of Lazene" which has to be added to the "Resurrection Seal"...

(More may be added to the History if I get any ideas)
 
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Her breasts are 13 cm in length!? Width, height or umm... sticking out?? Why not just give her a cup size man y'know like 22 B or somethin lol
 
Dude...I dreaded actually writing that... >_< ...but I had to make it easier to picture her.

I'll look for something, I dunno, i just measured what seemed like an average size going by the girls at my school >_<

I'll look like a right pervert with a bra size page on my history, so I'll put in what you just said, despite the point I don't keep tracks of them things.
 
O_O ROFLMFAO

13 cm boobs ROFL! Oh em gee xD I'm sorry, but I'm picturing that, and I can't stop laughing xD So insanely big! They're not body parts, they're weaponry!

Can't wait to see the finished product, but maybe you SHOULD tone down the size a little ;)
 
O_O ROFLMFAO

13 cm boobs ROFL! Oh em gee xD I'm sorry, but I'm picturing that, and I can't stop laughing xD So insanely big! They're not body parts, they're weaponry!

Can't wait to see the finished product, but maybe you SHOULD tone down the size a little ;)

I honest to god laughed my arse off when I saw that lmao, 22B Sonny 22B! That's a decent size!
 
o_O
I have never seen anyone that is that detailed, XX Cm that way. YY cm that way.

Considering her petite size, perhaps a small A-cup might be more logical ^^
But this is just my rambling ^^

but, I wont say that you cant be a big breasted girl ^^

Also, this is not a requirement, this is just a hint.
Her age, and DOB is ok and all that.
but state the Birth year?
say she enters a medieval RP
So, she is there, she is 17 years, but she will not be born for a few centuries ^^

Other then this, I think she can be interesting to RP with, as you will have to make up a few seal designs, at least a base description of some ^^

And I feel that FMA might hold some of them ^^
 
Yeah, that might seem like a bit more sense, I just went with what Danny recommended, I couldn't care less about breast size.

But yeah, good call, I might knock of the year.

As for the Seals, yes, I might draw out a few myself, but I might also take a few of FMA.
 
GRAGH :gasp: It was AWESOME up until the Magic section :gasp:

Magic: In order to take on the Seal Master disicipline, Abigail had to learn the basics of Necromancy and Clerical magic, but she has never actually used these moves in battle, and perhaps never will unless it is needed for learning a new Seal.
Necromancy: Abigail can use her mana to create fireballs, breezes of cold enough to freeze, summon lightning to strike enemies, as well as call upon shadow to attack an enemy.
Clerical: All Abigail has actually learned from Clerical, is one, but pretty much the very most basic of being a Cleric, the power to heal thereselves or others.

What we'll need here are descriptions of the individual skills that she uses and relative energy costs. If there are no set skills, simply state what the appearances and energy costs can range to.

For clerical skills, however, we will need a list of abilities. Simply saying that they can heal is extremely vague, as healing takes many different forms and varying energy costs.

Otherwise, you did a STUPENDOUS job on this bio. For now, it's [NOT APPROVED], but make the changes, and it's sure to go through.

And, just a little hint: Your 'Necromancy' skills aren't necromancy, just black magic. Necromancy is a magic type which involves utilizing corpses and carcasses; essentially the dead.
 
Blame Jade Curtiss from Tales of the Abyss for giving me the wrong idea :gasp:

Lol, nah I sort of knew resurecting the dead was involved, but I thought that was a mere part of it, well, I stand corrected lol.

Anyway, it's been fixed up, Necromancy has changed to elemental, moves given better description, and...sorted really.
 
Alright, now the only issues are the Shadow Summon and Freezing Breeze. Both of these have the same issue: no status conditioning allowed. I have no issue whatsoever with you creating a supremely cold gust of wind, or moving the shadows as described, but you can't blind or freeze a foe. Both suggest that the target becomes, in some way, unable to defend against your attacks (blinding will prevent blocking, while freezing will stop movement altogether).

I would suggest, in terms of the changes, that you make the Freezing Breeze into a skill that summons a gust of wind at sub-zero temperatures, but not enough to freeze somebody. No less (or more, depending on your standpoint) than -40 degrees Celsius (incidentally, the temperature is the same in Fahrenheit; -40 degrees). For the Shadow Summon, I would suggest heightening the energy cost a little and actually summoning a shadow demon from a nearby shadow, simply because controlling a shadow is pointless in a full-on battle; seasoned fighters won't be fooled by a moving shadow.

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Sonny, good character template. Although you really had me concerned with the cup size, but I'm not going to go into that one ...
 
Ok, I ditched them moves overall, Shadow that can't make an enemy blind isn't really worth it, but I don't want to go the lenghs of summoning a shadow beast. As for freezing, I will probaly not use it anyway, so I am not going to fussa about it.

@ Faith, Akward subject, girls don't usually blurt out these things, and unless I'm ready for a slap, I dare not ask o.o
 
Mate, you did an amazing job with this bio, you should be proud!

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Have fun RPing!
 
Thanks, it took the life outta me :gasp:

Too much decription :gasp:

Well, I'm glad that's sorted though, I'm also gonna sort out Filden Gurito at a later date. He needs a good updating since I posted him over a year ago, and I was in such a rush to RP, you can carve more details on a tree :gasp:

Anyway! To RPing! *Runs off*
 
Filden Gurito

Name: Filden Gurito
Pronounciation: Feel-den Gur-i-toe
Title: The Summoning Nin
Allignment: Good
Race: Human, of the Gurito family, son of Jaque Gurito and Beverly Elizabeth Gurito, (Maiden name, Harpene)
Gender: Male
Age: 16
Appearence: Filden is quite muscular, and is in very good shape due to his constant running exercises in order to keep his speed at it's peek. He is quite tanned due to usually working outside.

Filden's hair is brown and very short spikes, the top part of his hair faces upwards, while the sides and back all stick out at about a 20 degree angle outwards and points down. Filden's face is 16cms in height and 11cms in width, his ears are 4cm in lengh and 2cm wide, and his eyes are 2cm in heigh and 2cm in lengh and are dark green. He has a scar under his left eye.

Filden is 5ft 7, and he weights 11 stone 2, his legs make up half of his height, and his waist lengh is 33 inches. He wears 16-17 clothing.

Attire: Filden wears a green polo shirt, the V of the shirt reaches 8cms down, and has three buttons, and the colar is 2.7cm in height. Over the shirt he wears a brown sleevless jacket, which has overall six pockets, two pockets on his chest, two on his front stomach, and the other two on the sides, 13cm under his armpits, the pockets are all 13cm in height, and 10cm in width, and all have zippers.

Filden wears black combat trousers, reaching down to his ankles, and they have 2 side pockets, and 2 rear pockets, and 2 pockets that on the side of his knees. All pockets are velcro and 12cm in height and 7cm in width. He wears black boots with grey laces.

Filden wears brown gloves with cuffs that strech 7cm from his wrist. He also has green goggles that he wears around his neck. the spectacle of each goggle is 3cm height and 4cm width.

Personality: Filden has been known to be quite loud and cocky. He is outgoing and tends to have trouble keeping certain opinions to himself, (basically, he speaks his mind)

He has a habit of complaining, and has quite a bad case of OCD, so he doesn't take too kindly to messes. Filden is very wise when it comes to money, saying that he has to be with how much ninjutsu costs.

Despite the way in which is acts sometimes, he is a good person at heart and does have a strong sense of right and wrong. But, he has been taught to be quite cold, but he has always had trouble with this, so he decides to save it for the battlefield.

First impression: Many people do not like Filden and first, often thinking he is rude and noisy, but after holding a conversation with him for about 5 minutes, people tend to start liking him. If people a person is nasty to him at first, he doesn't even bother with them, and simply walks away, (unless they start trying to attack him, in which case, he fights back.) He does shock some people at first though, for they often think that all ninjas is cold, quiet, and mysterious.
Strengh: Filden's strengh is not over the top strong, he can lift about 23 KG, and if he hit an enemy with the strongest punch he could do, it would send the enemy flying about 10 feet away.
Speed: Filden's speed is probaly his most noticeable talent. His maximum running speed is 45 miles per hour for abut 20 minutes. He can also jump at 50 miles per hour, and the highest he can jump is 40 feet.
Endurance: Filden would probaly start needing to stop running after about 12 minutes. He can take to strikes quite well, and could cope with about 4 stab wounds in non-vital areas. Due to focusing more on evasion though, his defence is not the best of up-close fighters, but he can take hits quite well, probaly being able to take 30 punches before being knocked down.
Reflexes: Due to being a Ninja, Filden has quite fast reactions, responding to attacks about 0.34 seconds after being hit. He could move out of the way of a projectiled attack at a in 0.95 seconds.
Fighting Style: If Filden has located his enemy, and without his enemy being able to notice Filden (Filden being hidden) then Filden would try and fight from a distance with stealth, attempting to hit the enemy with long range weapons such as kunais, or, if the enemy has their back to Filden, he may attempt kills such as neck snapping or throat slitting, or if he is attacking without the intetion to kill, he may attempt a sleeper hold.

If Filden's enemy has noticed him, Filden would fight by quickly approaching the enemy and delivering a few strikes, and then quickly jumping away to a safe distance, and continueing like this, and sometimes throwing a few long range weapons every now and then. In the unlikely event Filden is located, he fights in a cross between unarmed Ninjutsu as well as Tai-Chi, similar to how he fights with weapons, he would approach the enemy attempting to strike, and then jump back again. He usually tries to hit enemies in the nerve points.

Weapons: Filden has a small variety of weapons consisting of typical ninja equipment such as ninja stars, kunais, string, and scrolls, however, his main weapon is his giant Shuriken that he has named "Nova Star". His Shuriken has four blades emerging from the circular handle, each blade stretching 80cm long, and each blade has a 65 degree angle between it. The circular handles have leather clothe over it for easy grip. The leather on the handle is brown, and the blades of the shuriken are all silver on one half and black on the other.
Armour: To maintain his fast speed, Filden avoids wearing heavy armour, so his only protection is his clothing.
Abilities: Fildeen's abilities consists of his ninjutsu, and some of his ninjutsu requires scrolls for the ninjutsu. (Scrolls are one use only, and before he sets out, he usually takes 6 for each ability)

Kunai Storm (Scroll required): Filden gets out a Kunai Storm scroll, then balances the scroll on his fingers while forming the Bird handsign, after about 10 seconds, the scroll then begins forming a blue aura that surrounds the scroll, Filden then then holds the scrolls with one hand, then opens it with the other, and from the scroll, emerges an army of 50 kunais that travel at 40 miles per hour. The kunais do not home and can be easily avoided by the enemy. Due to having to share some of his energy with the scroll, this skill slightly tires Filden for about 30 seconds after use.
Illusionary Clone: (Scroll required): Filden gets out the Illusionary Clone scroll, and quickly forms the Sheep handseal while balancing the scroll on his fingertips, after about 5 seconds, the scroll explodes in a massive puff of a smoke, and once the smoke clears, a clone of Filden appears. This clone is merely an illusion created by the scroll, and can cause no physical harm to an enemy. The clone lasts until it is hit by the enemy or if Filden dismisses it. When it goes, it fades away. Once again, this would cost Filden a little bit of his energy and slightly tires him out for 30 seconds.
Scatter (No Scroll required): Filden holds Shuriken with boths hands and holds it out in front of him, a golden aura begins to surround Filden and his Shuriken. Then he then shouts "Scatter!" His Shuriken then seperates into four pieces each consisting of 90 degrees of the handle and a blade of the Shuriken. The four blades then attempt to home on the enemy for 30 seconds before returning back to it's original state as a Shuriken. This move usually tires Filden out slightly for about 10 seconds after using it, and he cannot use it again for another five minutes.


Magic: Filden has been gifted with the mystic art of summoning. So far, he has only been granted one Spirit, (more will be obtained with time). Summoning is a a very powerful art, and because of that, Filden is slightly tired out during the presence of his summon, for every minute a spirit is out, it would be enough to tire Filden out for a minute after the spirit's dismissal.
Amoeba: It looks slightly like a dog, but he has silver spikes going from the top of it's head all the way to the end of it's tail, like some sort of hedgehog. It glows a strange cream colour, with big beady opal coloured eyes, sharp teeth, and 5 cm claws, and a tale with what appears to be a pitchfork at the end. His most powerful skill, “The Big Bang,” is not to be taken likely...Amoeba begins amitting a silver light, and after 30 seconds, the move begins. It creates an illusion that makes the setting of battle appear to be space, and it then creates an explosion of matter and hydrogen. This attack deals massive non elemental damage to everyone within a 50 feet radius of Amoeba. This move costs Amoeba a lot of energy, and once used, Amoeba has to rest, so he dismisses his self. It can only be used once a day. (If Filden was level 10, this attack would deal around 900 HP.)

History: Filden was born into a rich family. His father was a High Summoner, while his mother was a successful business woman who ran a successful media empire. He had everything he could possibly want, his parents could afford everything they wanted, with the fame of his father, and the wealth of his mother, Filden had a fantastic life...

One day though, when Filden was seven, Filden was in his bedroom sleeping, his mother way adding up her income in the study, whilst his father was reading in the library. "Knock knock!" The door went loudly...their was a moment of silence as his mother dropped what she was doing, and his father stopped reading...Filden remained sleeping. Both of the parents got up, and began making their way to the front door.

Both of the parents enter the main hall at the same time...they eventually noticed each other...Beverly approached her husband and gripped his hand tightly with both of her hands...Jaque then rested his other hand on hers. They then both slowly approached the door...Jaque then went to open the door..."Bang Bang Bang!" Machine gun bullets pelted right through the door, striking the couple...

Both bodys began dropping...with each one making sure that one hand was holding the hand of the other...their eyes widened as more and more bullets went through their body...then the bullets stopped...The couple eventually hit the floor...staring into each other's eyes...as a tear came down the side of Beverly...

The rucus awoke Filden...he rubbed one eye and jumped off his bed, he then began walking downstairs...thinking it was just the TV...Filden was completely unaware of what he was about to see...

...The blood drenched body's of his parents...Filden's eye widened in fear as he saw this...tears came down from both eyes...he dropped to the floor onto his knees, as he began crying fully...

...Five hours later, Filden's uncle, Ed Gurito, came charging through the doors with the police squad and forensics behind him...Ed gasped as he saw his sister...and his brother-in-law. He then noticed Filden crying across the hall. He ran over to his nephew, and hugged him...

Ever since then, Filden has lived with Ed...living with him in his flat, eventually getting used to the drop from a high class life to a middle class life. Managing to get over the things he saw when he reached 10...realising that, as his father always told him, "Life goes on..." He simply continued living on as his uncle's apprentice, hoping to one day become a full mechanic.
 
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Well, post here when you have it finished, or PM either Contra or myself :monster: Let us know, and we'll have a looksee.
 
Well I've finally got over losing that hours worth of work I did on this profile when my internet decided to restart on me lol.

Anyway, it is ready to be judged fully :D

(Blimey, writting that history made me feel a bit saddened lol)
 
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Apologies for the delay. Tourney and all :neomon:

Stitch said:
Strength: Filden's strengh is not over the top strong, he can lift about 23 KG, and if he hit an enemy with 500 HP and minimal defence, he would deal about 78HP.

This is fine, but I feel compelled to remind you that RPs do not generally go by stats. This is simply a general reference for yourself and other RPers.

Kunai Storm (Scroll required): Filden gets out a Kunai Storm scroll, then balances the scroll on his fingers while forming the Bird handsign, the scroll then begins forming a blue aura that surrounds the scroll, Filden then throws then holds the scrolls with one hand, then opens it with the other, and from the scroll, emerges an army of 50 kunais that travel at 40 miles per hour. The kunais do not home and can be easily avoided by the enemy.
The skill in and of itself is good, but we will need some kind of energy cost. Whether it's energy, mana, fatigue, etc., we can't have a skill without a relative cost. Casting/activation times are also required.


Illusionary Clone (Scroll required): Filden gets out the Illusionary Clone scroll, and quickly forms the Sheep handseal while balancing the scroll on his fingertips, the scroll then explodes in a massive puff of a smoke, and once the smoke clears, a clone of Filden appears. This clone is merely an illusion created by the scroll, and can cause no physical harm to an enemy.
Once again, cost and activation time are necessary. Good skill, but lacking in a few essentials.

Scatter (No Scroll required): Filden holds Shuriken with boths hands and holds it out in front of him, a golden aura begins to surround Filden and his Shuriken. Then he then shouts "Scatter!" His Shuriken then seperates into four pieces each consisting of 90 degrees of the handle and a blade of the Shuriken. The four blades then attempt to home on the enemy for 30 seconds before returning back to it's original state as a Shuriken. This move usually tires Filden out slightly for about 10 seconds after using it, and he cannot use it again for another five minutes.
I like it. Effective, uses a logical amount of energy, and has a disabling time.

Amoeba: It looks slightly like a dog, but he has silver spikes going from the top of it's head all the way to the end of it's tail, like some sort of hedgehog. It glows a strange cream colour, with big beady opal coloured eyes, sharp teeth, and 5 cm claws, and a tale with what appears to be a pitchfork at the end. His most powerful skill, “The Big Bang,” is not to be taken likely...It creates an illusion that makes the setting of battle appear to be space, and it then creates an explosion of matter and hydrogen.
Once again, like the idea, but lacking in some essentials. How much energy does the summon take, how long does it take to cast said summon, etc.? Also, the "Big Bang" attack. How much energy does it take for Amoeba? I would suggest that the attack be used only once, and die it down a bit (the skill sounds similar to the "Flare" spell from FFIX, which is extremely powerful). Describe the effects of that skill, as well as the aforementioned essentials.


Change that up and I'll have another look through :monster: It's a really good bio, just lacking in a few necessities.

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Updated and mistakes fixed...well...the missing things added :gasp:

Hopefully this will do, and also, the side effects on Filden during summoning has been written on the Magic paragraph.

Edit: Oh, and I also replaced the HP statistic in strengh with how far a full force punch from Filden could send an enemy.
 
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