Fan Fiction [DISCUSSION] Resident Evil: Break Point

[Diana]

Here you can discuss my latest story, Resident Evil: Break Point. Tell me what you think, and how I can improve the story. It may be important to re-read the story at times because it may be edited and changed. Thanks.

Here is the story.

 

[Monster]

I did read the story, and it is so far so good. I like how I can imagine it in my head and see everything. I noticed a few grammar mistakes, but they seem to have been corrected now. A few "it's" instead of "its" and "of" instead of "off" but you corrected it.

The story seems to be quite good. I like it so far.