Poetry ~Eden's Playground~

[Stop_Fire]

ok, these are a couple of song lyrics i wrote...i just want you pllz to look at it, and reply please!

first song i wanna post, i'll add somemore only if someone replys.....v_v

Falling Off~


<!--coloro:#006600--><!--/coloro--><!--sizeo:1--><!--/sizeo-->Could I be so wrong?
Could I even belong?
Take away my lies and trust me for, who I am

Could this be the path?
That I've waited on, for all my life
Even then I'm trying to belong
In a word so wrong

I'm falling off the 31st floor
Calling, calling for no one at all
Falling off the 31st floor
Not screaming or dreaming
Because I know that I'm falling-
Off the 31st floor

Do I deserve this life?
Is it wrong to want approval?
Take away the scars of life and keep my path
I know I'll find my place-
If I pray hard enough, but who would care for a broken soul

I'm falling off the 31st floor
Calling, calling for no one at all
Falling off the 31st floor
I'm grieving- for bleeding
As I hit the floor

Save me from the darkest depth
Don't let go, and catch me, when I'm falling off

I'm falling off the 31st floor
Calling, calling for no one at all
Falling off the 31st floor
Breathing- bleeding
No more

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So, what do ya think, PLEASE REPLY!!!!!
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[Shenorai]

Well, it LOOKS pretty good, but how would it sound? That's what I'm really interested in.

 

[Shygirlfrumfl]

good lyrics i wonder how it sounds like