First of all, before I begin, I would like to point out that all chapters prior to the seventh are different concerning style of writing, grammar (and errors), maturity, sentence structure and so on (this is due to the fact that they were written a few years back when I was younger). What I'm trying to say is, if the first six chapters seem somewhat amateurish and undeveloped, I've matured a great amount since then. My style of writing will differ from the seventh chapter and onwards, so to all you avid readers, give it a fair chance once you get to that point. Thank you (I could rewrite them... but I'd rather just keep moving along with the story! I'm to lazy to change them right now! Ha hah!)!
Also, here's the LINK to a 'Read & Review' thread! I'd like to know what you think of the story (again, no point in commenting on grammar before the seventh chapter, because it's irrelevant now), likes and dislikes, etc. Hope you enjoy!
RATING: M for Blood and Gore (some scenes quite graphic, not suitable for children), Strong Language, Dark Themes, Suggestive Themes
GENRE: Angst/Romance/Action/Adventure
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Prologue
"If you touch her..." the tanned boy spoke, gritting his teeth angrily as he did “….I'll kill you." There was silence in the ancient room. Tidus stood in front of the door he had just came from. Sweat dripped from his forehead, falling onto his scarred chest. All the clothing, besides his arm guard and glove, had been ripped to pieces. He was breathing heavily, his well built frame moving at every breath.
“Hm hm hm…..you think I am afraid of YOU! HA!” the figure laughed, raising something into the air. It was dark in here, so Tidus could not make it out right away. After a few moments, he made it out as a person. He squinted hard, trying to see who it was, and then recognized it.“YUNA!” Tidus exclaimed, taking a step forward. “LET HER GO!” He yelled. “Hm hm….protective, aren’t we.” The shadow smirked, raising Yuna higher. She seemed lifeless. She wasn’t moving at all. “Y-Yuna…..” He studdered, anger starting to take him completely. “WHAT HAVE YOU DONE WITH HER!” Tidus screamed, falling to his knees as he did. “Don’t worry…..I have not killed her….yet…” The shadowy figure, edged closer to Tidus, slowly.
He bolted up from the ground, holding up his swords. He wielded two fine blades. He had the Brotherhood, a mystical sword, it’s blade looking as though it was made entirely of water. An ornament, placed right above the handle, was the head of a dragon, with a dim-yellow eye in it’s center. There was a red ribbon, tied securely around the hilt of the handle. His other sword, the legendary, Caladbolg. It’s blue, celestial light shone brightly in the darkness of the room. The gold on the blade only made it more wonderous, and there was nothing sharper than this weapon. The blade was not the same on either side, which made it unique, unlike most other swords which were almost identical on both sides.
“I’ll tell you one more time…..Let…Yuna….GO!” Tidus was getting impatient, holding the Brotherhood up, with the Caladbolg still at his side. “I’m sorry….but I cannot allow her to live….her life is needed for…..what is to come…..” The figure cackled, raising Yuna higher into the air, then lowering her onto a stone table. Tidus ran forward, ready to strike down this thing, but was blown back hard into the wall, leaving a crack in it as he fell to the floor, the debris crumbling onto his shoulder. The man only laughed at this, turning around to Yuna, who had now finally opened her eyes. The blonde haired blitzer could only see one thing in her beautiful bi-colored eyes…..fear! Tidus stood up, holding his head, as it ached in pain.
“T-Tidus….help me…..” The brunette whimpered quietly, flinching as the man struck her. “SHUT UP WOMAN!” He shouted, as he slapped her across the face, leaving a red mark. Yuna’s face felt like wild fire, almost like it was burning. She started to cry, after all the pain, and nightmares she had been put through, she couldn’t hold it in anymore. She sobbed, receiving a hit every time she made a sound.
Tidus’s hate for this man was building by the second, and couldn’t watch Yuna be in this pain. He muttered quietly, but loud enough for him to hear in a threatening way.
“Touch her one more time….and you’re a dead man…..” He was about to hit Yuna again, but his hand stopped just above her face. No one moved for a while, then the man over Yuna started laughing. Tidus was annoyed, for he did not know what he found so funny.
“WHAT ARE YOU LAUGHING AT, HUH?” The blonde yelled, holding both his weapons high, ready to take on anything. The figure stopped laughing, and slowly turned around. Tidus wished he could see the man, but it was so dark on the other side of the room, he couldn’t make out the person over there. “How can you kill…..what is already dead…..”
The blitzer was shocked by this statement. He took a step back, as the man stepped closer, finally out of the shadow’s. He was covered by a black cloak, a hood over his head. He placed his gloved hands on his head, pulling down the hood. It finally came off. Tidus couldn’t believe who it was. He fell to the ground, fear overtaking his body. “Th-this…cannot be! You….you’re….THIS ISN’T HAPPENING!” He screamed, as he grabbed his head, his headache only getting worse.
The man smiled, his icy glare locked on boy’s quivering body. “So……you remembered me…..”
Also, here's the LINK to a 'Read & Review' thread! I'd like to know what you think of the story (again, no point in commenting on grammar before the seventh chapter, because it's irrelevant now), likes and dislikes, etc. Hope you enjoy!
RATING: M for Blood and Gore (some scenes quite graphic, not suitable for children), Strong Language, Dark Themes, Suggestive Themes
GENRE: Angst/Romance/Action/Adventure
________________________________________________________________________________________
Prologue
"If you touch her..." the tanned boy spoke, gritting his teeth angrily as he did “….I'll kill you." There was silence in the ancient room. Tidus stood in front of the door he had just came from. Sweat dripped from his forehead, falling onto his scarred chest. All the clothing, besides his arm guard and glove, had been ripped to pieces. He was breathing heavily, his well built frame moving at every breath.
“Hm hm hm…..you think I am afraid of YOU! HA!” the figure laughed, raising something into the air. It was dark in here, so Tidus could not make it out right away. After a few moments, he made it out as a person. He squinted hard, trying to see who it was, and then recognized it.“YUNA!” Tidus exclaimed, taking a step forward. “LET HER GO!” He yelled. “Hm hm….protective, aren’t we.” The shadow smirked, raising Yuna higher. She seemed lifeless. She wasn’t moving at all. “Y-Yuna…..” He studdered, anger starting to take him completely. “WHAT HAVE YOU DONE WITH HER!” Tidus screamed, falling to his knees as he did. “Don’t worry…..I have not killed her….yet…” The shadowy figure, edged closer to Tidus, slowly.
He bolted up from the ground, holding up his swords. He wielded two fine blades. He had the Brotherhood, a mystical sword, it’s blade looking as though it was made entirely of water. An ornament, placed right above the handle, was the head of a dragon, with a dim-yellow eye in it’s center. There was a red ribbon, tied securely around the hilt of the handle. His other sword, the legendary, Caladbolg. It’s blue, celestial light shone brightly in the darkness of the room. The gold on the blade only made it more wonderous, and there was nothing sharper than this weapon. The blade was not the same on either side, which made it unique, unlike most other swords which were almost identical on both sides.
“I’ll tell you one more time…..Let…Yuna….GO!” Tidus was getting impatient, holding the Brotherhood up, with the Caladbolg still at his side. “I’m sorry….but I cannot allow her to live….her life is needed for…..what is to come…..” The figure cackled, raising Yuna higher into the air, then lowering her onto a stone table. Tidus ran forward, ready to strike down this thing, but was blown back hard into the wall, leaving a crack in it as he fell to the floor, the debris crumbling onto his shoulder. The man only laughed at this, turning around to Yuna, who had now finally opened her eyes. The blonde haired blitzer could only see one thing in her beautiful bi-colored eyes…..fear! Tidus stood up, holding his head, as it ached in pain.
“T-Tidus….help me…..” The brunette whimpered quietly, flinching as the man struck her. “SHUT UP WOMAN!” He shouted, as he slapped her across the face, leaving a red mark. Yuna’s face felt like wild fire, almost like it was burning. She started to cry, after all the pain, and nightmares she had been put through, she couldn’t hold it in anymore. She sobbed, receiving a hit every time she made a sound.
Tidus’s hate for this man was building by the second, and couldn’t watch Yuna be in this pain. He muttered quietly, but loud enough for him to hear in a threatening way.
“Touch her one more time….and you’re a dead man…..” He was about to hit Yuna again, but his hand stopped just above her face. No one moved for a while, then the man over Yuna started laughing. Tidus was annoyed, for he did not know what he found so funny.
“WHAT ARE YOU LAUGHING AT, HUH?” The blonde yelled, holding both his weapons high, ready to take on anything. The figure stopped laughing, and slowly turned around. Tidus wished he could see the man, but it was so dark on the other side of the room, he couldn’t make out the person over there. “How can you kill…..what is already dead…..”
The blitzer was shocked by this statement. He took a step back, as the man stepped closer, finally out of the shadow’s. He was covered by a black cloak, a hood over his head. He placed his gloved hands on his head, pulling down the hood. It finally came off. Tidus couldn’t believe who it was. He fell to the ground, fear overtaking his body. “Th-this…cannot be! You….you’re….THIS ISN’T HAPPENING!” He screamed, as he grabbed his head, his headache only getting worse.
The man smiled, his icy glare locked on boy’s quivering body. “So……you remembered me…..”