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sorry it's taking me so long to get into this one. I've just been so busy lately with work and end of semester stuff that I've hardly have enough time to post in the rps i'm in let only the ones I just joined. I promis once I have a little more time I'll make my entrance as Simba. it'll probably be this weakend, since the semester is almost over and projects are due
 
Take your time. I'm introducing Scar as an NPC soon, so you'll definitely have something to do :P

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I have a question, Tidus. Are you trying to write in Third Person Limited, or Third Person Omniscient point of view. Your posts have the elements of both, and can be a little confusing ^_^ You should choose one (personally, I suggest TPL, because TPO is almost impossible to do properly), and stick with it.

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Alright guys, I'm going to transfer the general storyline from our posts onto Word, and make it into a kind of mock fanfiction. That way, it will be easier to keep up with the goings on.

I plan to post the fan fiction and update it in here, but I will probably (though not definitely) post it in the Writers' Boulevard section of Spira.
 
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All right, all right...ya talked me into it. :P

Not sure how many of you are familiar with the Aladdin TV series, though there is a feline villainness named Mirage.

I've yet to do just a tad more research to get her down just right, but I figured 'why the hell not?'

For more info regarding Mirage, here's a Wiki page to serve as a bit of an explanation. I may have to tone certain magic down a bit, though.
 
is it ok if i join in?

i would like to be Monkey Fist from Disney's Kim Possible? i love that show and i dont care what you think :D
 
You'd both be welcome here :) We'd love to have you.

Just to make sure, you guys do know how your characters work, right? I.e. Mirage is a cowardly, yet coniving, sorceress, and Monkey Fist is a stubborn and rather comedic villain.
 
Well, a lot of characters were no less than ripped into the Redwall dimension, and from my understanding, Simba was too. You can bring them in that way, if you guys want.
 
im most likly going to have Monkey Fist chase Kim Possible until he sees a wierd statue. Then itll tuen out to be a vortex and he'll be sucked in or something like that ill post when i get home from hockey.
 
Sorry I haven't posted in a couple days. My school and work schedule a getting tough right now with finals, projects and christmas coming. so it may be a week until I can get a good post out.
 
Well Lux, here's the things that i found wrong with the post.

First and foremost: at this point, the group on the ledge is comprised of the following:

Matthias the Warrior, Felldoh the Squirrel, Jake Long, Brome the Healer, Simba. If you want to include Scar, he just ran away, so you'd probably just be seeing his tail as he ran off.

Orlando the Axe and Martin the Warrior are on the other ledge on the left (when looking out of the entrance) hand side of the cave. They are not with Felldoh and the others yet (though they should be, I'm just waiting for Dark Tidus to post).

The point: you have to be careful to read the posts ahead of yours, so you get an idea of what is going on. Just going in there and posting is a big no-no, you have to know what is going on. After all, how can anybody interact if they don't use the other players' posts?

Second thing isn't quite so major. I just noticed that you deviated from Kim Possible (the show) a little. Since your starting off as Montague Fiske, not Monkey Fisk, you should make sure to keep details as accurate to the episode you are coming from. For example, the final monkey statue was found in the jungle, and Montey impersonated a Tai Jing Pek Kwa (I think that's what Monkey Kung Fu is called....) ninja to steal the final statue, etc.

Also, there were four statues total, not five. Your post said 'The 4 monkey statues he had gotten previously.' That, coupled with the fact that you went out and got another, makes five statues total.

I also noticed that you completely deviated from the facts of how and when etc. Monkey Fist got his powers. He fought with Ron and holo-Kim, for example, in his mansion. It was a big thing for Ron to become a MMM (Mystical Monkey Master) and that was a key aspect of the entire episode. If you'd had Monkey Fist chasing Kim and Ron, and then stumbling into the portal, that would have been different, nothing wrong with that. But you must remain as accurate to the details (or end details) or the episode your character is coming from.

I suppose the best way to iterate this is to use an example. For example, if I had Jake coming from an episode (and if he was my primary character), I would have to have stated how he came across the portal, why he fell into it, etc. and still remain accurate to the goings-on of that episode until then. However, since he is not my primary character, and he came after the Hong Kong Longs episode, I do not need to say this stuff. However, since Monkey Fist is your primary character, and you are entering from an episode, you have to state the details.

On a final note, I also noticed that you seem to have ignored one small subtlety: detail on entering the realm. Unless you are leaving the entering of the portal open for your next post (i.e. ending your post at "He walked slowly through the portal"), you should state feeling, sound, sight, etc.




Now that I'm done my rant, I'm thinking I will reserve Matthias as my fourth and final character. That way I can fully control my section of the group, and use them to their fullest extent.
 
I guess i better Watch the episode... I dont know where to find it though... Im new to URPG so bear with me.
 
I have placed in a new rule, due to unwanted inactivity.

People who do not post within two weeks after reserving their character or their last post will automatically have their character changed to an NPC until such time as they reserve it again.

Those who are currently in the RP will have a five day grace period effective immediately. In other words, five days from now, if those who have not posted on their characters for two weeks or more do not post, their characters will become non-playable characters until such time as you reserve them again.

If you are going away and you know you are going to be gone for longer than this time period, you must PM me. This is desirable for anybody who is going to be away for a prolonged period, even if it is less than two weeks, but it is imperative that you do this if you are aware you will be away for more than two weeks.

One reason this isn't such a good thing for you is that once they become NPCs, they may be maneuvered into a situation that you didn't want them to be in while you were controlling them, and you'll have to change your ideas to match the situation that your character is in.

This will hopefully promote activity, but there is an alterior motive. If such a time comes and you do reserve the character again, it will make you more versatile. Not only is this a way to attempt to boost activity, but also to improve the skills of those who may be in need of some help.
 
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well if that were to happen then they would have to inform Hera about it and then itll be fine i suppose.. IDK lol... anyways i get it.
 
Kyle's right. I suppose that I should've put it in there (can't believe I forgot that ^^; ).

If you are aware that you will be away for more than two weeks, you must PM me saying why. This must be done at least 24 hours in advance. If you are going to be away for a planned vacation, I recommend that you let me know at least 4 days in advance. You can still do the 24 hour thing, but if you let me know at least 4 days in advance, it will give us a better opportunity to plan around your absence.

It is also suggested that if you are going to be absent, you do likewise with your character for the duration of your inaccesibility. In toher words, if you are leaving, give your character something to do away from the group he/she is travelling with until you return, and then rejoin the group.
 
Sylar has a good reason, his school takes precedence over this, but it's Dark Tidus that is really bugging me. I've already PMed him, and I have yet to get a PM back, and I've seen him on multiple times.

Kyle, you should finish up the scene, buddy. You're making all of us wait.

We're not next to the river anymore, we're on the ledge on the oter side.

To clarify, when looking out of the cave, the river runs on the left, about a hundred or so feet from the mouth of the cave, and we are on the right, a little more than a hundred feet away from the mouth.

As of now, our group on the side without the river consists of Felldoh, Matthias, Brome, Jake, and Simba. Monkey Fist is also there, but if you're waiting for him to leave, then...self explanatory really ^^;

But, if you are going to interact with Tidus' characters, Martin and Orlando, they are on the other side of the cave, by the river. Or so I would imagine as DT hasn't posted yet.
 
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