I wouldn't say friends, but they are acquaintances. However, he still wouldn't allow any shenanigans.
[S/D] Eureka Academy: Second Semester
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I wouldn't say friends, but they are acquaintances. However, he still wouldn't allow any shenanigans.
(rant) Great a total rant post that features self importance, and wastes more space than mega long pointless RP posts that barely connect to the story at stake. (/rant)
That said, he is sorta right TMR.
Yeah FF, you know how much that helps him fix it: 0. You can be a bit LESS of a dick about it, and maybe give something i don't know....useful he can use? Not everybody assumes that they can just know what/how to change shit when someone just says "it's shit".
This isn't very friendly. I suggest everyone takes a step back and leaves each other alone. I don't know where FF gets off on getting on peoples backs for bringing a character into it that might not be original. It's not cool, bro. You wouldn't like it done to you.
Let's not fill up Oliver's discussion thread with bitching and ranting at each other. It's hardly polite to the RP creator. =/
Also, We'll see, Orion. It really depends on how Orion is with her. She's not going to take bullshit and she won't ever trust him because of his past. But she doesn't trust anyone bar one person, so
Let's not fill up Oliver's discussion thread with bitching and ranting at each other. It's hardly polite to the RP creator. =/
Also, We'll see, Orion. It really depends on how Orion is with her. She's not going to take bullshit and she won't ever trust him because of his past. But she doesn't trust anyone bar one person, so
~shocked-onigiri~
Clourith Fanboy
and i have to point this out FF the main character of fruits basket is actually... TOHRU not kyo, yes he is a principal character but he isnt the main. and i agree... its like the first bio i have ever made for a non ff or kh rp so chill and give me advice alright?
and i think the character isnt actually anything like kyo... apart from the fact he looks like him and does turn into a cat if a girl hugs him... as far as i know kyo isnt gay? or extremely smart? and last i knew he spoke a little too... i am sorry for the rasnt here but im so annoyed... im working on the character ok? its a work in progress!
and i think the character isnt actually anything like kyo... apart from the fact he looks like him and does turn into a cat if a girl hugs him... as far as i know kyo isnt gay? or extremely smart? and last i knew he spoke a little too... i am sorry for the rasnt here but im so annoyed... im working on the character ok? its a work in progress!
I wouldn't say friends, but they are acquaintances. However, he still wouldn't allow any shenanigans.
As stated many times before, Orion is far more disciplined. He also has a way to deal with people who persistently try to fight and kill him.
... Uhm, it isn't against the school rules to bury someone up to their chin in the dirt and leave them their for two hours for attacking him, is it? Because if it is, I'll need a new restraint plan...
Excuse me it was a unwarranted but it goes towards deep seated annoyance with people who cant come up with something a little more original than "ooh i saw that on tv/videogame/etc lets be exactly the same or just a little bit different so i dont get copy right lawsuits and cease and desist orders shunted my way" or what yahtzee calls the "lets be like halo" problem...
That said i am more then willing to help the guy out with his bio should he decide to take me up on the offer, i have some experiance in writing the things (I think i have written like 50ish over the decade or so I have been playing on line rpgs) And i am quite sure we could come up with an original and cool character between the two of us, again should he wish to take me up on that offer...
As for the argument of offering constructive critism, i do help people write characters, i have offered constructive critisim in this very thread. And while i am cognisent of the fact that my last post was worded stupidly, it seems, to me anyways, hard to offer constructive criticism on a char that is so obviously copy pasted straight from popular media. (Barring as i said perhaps choosing friendlier vocabulary)
I want to offer my heartfelt apologies to the poster in question (i have forgotten your name for which i am sorry) and would like to offer my assistance in helping you come up with a cool and more original bio.
As for Ke@$has commentary should you wish to discuss that further i believe PM would be a more appropriate venue for that discussion.
EDIT: Seems instant response/notification isn't quite instant... Okay granted i see Fruits basket more as what i believe is called an ensemble cast in the lingo, and i was hasty in reading the biography (curse you my dyslectic brain) it seems you have editted more then i noticed on my first pass but i think it could do with a little work... Well the offer stands should you wish to bounce some ideas around
That said i am more then willing to help the guy out with his bio should he decide to take me up on the offer, i have some experiance in writing the things (I think i have written like 50ish over the decade or so I have been playing on line rpgs) And i am quite sure we could come up with an original and cool character between the two of us, again should he wish to take me up on that offer...
As for the argument of offering constructive critism, i do help people write characters, i have offered constructive critisim in this very thread. And while i am cognisent of the fact that my last post was worded stupidly, it seems, to me anyways, hard to offer constructive criticism on a char that is so obviously copy pasted straight from popular media. (Barring as i said perhaps choosing friendlier vocabulary)
I want to offer my heartfelt apologies to the poster in question (i have forgotten your name for which i am sorry) and would like to offer my assistance in helping you come up with a cool and more original bio.
As for Ke@$has commentary should you wish to discuss that further i believe PM would be a more appropriate venue for that discussion.
EDIT: Seems instant response/notification isn't quite instant... Okay granted i see Fruits basket more as what i believe is called an ensemble cast in the lingo, and i was hasty in reading the biography (curse you my dyslectic brain) it seems you have editted more then i noticed on my first pass but i think it could do with a little work... Well the offer stands should you wish to bounce some ideas around
TMRevolution
ignore them
You probably just need to flesh out your character a little, give him more of a history as it's a bit short. Does he have any other abilities other than changing into a cat? Make him seem more human by giving him more details, maybe even change what the character looks like so he isn't too much like Kyo from Fruits basket?
ignore them
You probably just need to flesh out your character a little, give him more of a history as it's a bit short. Does he have any other abilities other than changing into a cat? Make him seem more human by giving him more details, maybe even change what the character looks like so he isn't too much like Kyo from Fruits basket?
~shocked-onigiri~
Clourith Fanboy
ok im editing it now but im keeping the cat transformation thing but well... youll see
Seriously, TMR, the best advice anyone can give you right now is to ignore him. This is your first bio, and no one is going to criticize you (except for maybe FF) for the bio not being solid gold. The community is here to help if you need it. Good luck. 
Name: Nami Hitsugiru
Age: 15
Title: Nobody's heartless
Class: Techno wizard
Appearance:
(before a girl hugs him, below is after a girl hugs him)
http://www.foroswebgratis.com/imagenes_foros/5/9/4/8/5/206647fb_kyo087.jpg
Personality: uptight and easily angered but only when people are new to him, he gains friendship over time and gets gradually nicer
Weapons: fists (he is a muay thai specialist)
Abilities: Uses his computer to alter the fabric of time and space, but doesnt ever use it because its too dangerous, he can die trying to use it
History: Orphaned as a child due to an attempt to use his power to make life better for his family he went into shock and has stopped speaking entirely he hasnt spoke for 5 years and only recently was his work seen as good enough to get him into the academy without a verbal meeting
ID Info
Color: orange
Avi/Picture: smaller pic of the headshot of my appearance (not the cat one)
Likes: tuna
Dislikes: rain
Sect: orange (If possible)
I think this is nice for a first bio!
Nicer than my first bio anyways. Lets see here. Add a bit more personality (how is he around people, how is he alone, what's his strengths and weaknesses, etc etc?). just fill it up a few more lines of text. Same with his history. Just elaborate on how he coped with his non talking. I'd say just a few more lines longer on this as well. I'm not too fond of using a computer to alter time and space. How about giving him a less dangerous ability o.o That one has the potential to become too powerful...Unless his computer gets busted :3
Also I'm fine with everything else except your sect. There are only black, red and blue. I'll place him in blue sect if that's alright with you? ^^ Nice work and welcome to Eureka Academy. Not all of us are mean, I promise :3
I wouldn't be one to talk seeing as Nova's bio is mostly based on sex appeal, and don't get me started on that octopus... Your bios aren't exactly masterpieces either. Please be nicer, especially when it comes to new members. That's only the first strike
Also to the person who created the regular character bio earlier it's accepted along with Veerle and another bio which probably escapes me. My sinuses are clearing up so I'll get on IDs and I'll need the image for someone's ID (I forgot who the person was at the moment but I'll get to you).
Might get up a post later. I'd like for Pharra to interact with Maya later since she likes to sing
Edit: Oh and my post tomorrow will be the start of dinner so get those starting posts going! ^^
as i said, good luck with the edit and should you wish to throw some ideas around i am usually a nicer guy then that:S just that sometimes i have poor (read non existant) impulse control...
I bid you all a fond fairwell as its 0045 here and i need to get up early tomorrow for work... But i see oli has taken time out his busy shedual to offer some critique so i will leave this in your capable hands
Edit, well sure nova's a sexy char which can if used correctly be a potent power in it's own right... But i dont think i mention it outside the history and appearance sections (although granted it's been quite some time since i read that bio in full) And yeah the squid was never intended as a bio to save after this story was over (and possible sequels) But as i said Sweet dreams... And i will pick this up on my tomorrow and possibly your tonights... Have a nice *time zone appropriate word here*
I bid you all a fond fairwell as its 0045 here and i need to get up early tomorrow for work... But i see oli has taken time out his busy shedual to offer some critique so i will leave this in your capable hands
Edit, well sure nova's a sexy char which can if used correctly be a potent power in it's own right... But i dont think i mention it outside the history and appearance sections (although granted it's been quite some time since i read that bio in full) And yeah the squid was never intended as a bio to save after this story was over (and possible sequels) But as i said Sweet dreams... And i will pick this up on my tomorrow and possibly your tonights... Have a nice *time zone appropriate word here*
Is it too late to join? If not, then here's my bio:
General Info
Name: Kazuma Miyazawa
Age: 22
Title: None.
Class:Assassin
Appearance:
Personality: Kazuma is Cold and distant at first glance. Because of his heritage, he hasn't had the chance to become accustomed to social life untill now. Although he is also calm and collected in battle, there are also times when he doubts himself, and over-compensates, which cause tension between him and most other people he teams up with.
Kazuma also has a split personality, where if struck from behind, or if he goes into into depression, his 'other self' comes out, amplifying his speed. This is usually noticable by his blank expression in his eyes. they will look as if there was no life in his eyes.
Weapons: Kazuma's choice of weaponry consists of 2 katanas, in a Dual Wielding fashion. The first blade has the ability to poison the foe, but only if the suer allows it, hence the poison never gets used in friendly combat within the school compounds, but it is rumoured that when hit with this blade in school, that a burning sensation can still be felt when struck, from the small remnants of poison still left on the blade.
The Second Blade creates steam around the blade, making it appear as if the steam was the blade itself. Whenever the blade cuts the foe, it also makes the opponent feel a burning sensation, although this is caused from the heat generated from the blade which created the steam.
Abilities: Kazuma has the ability to amplify the potency of the poison from his first blade, and the intensity of the heat from the steam of his second blade. He is also resourceful, using his ninja items to help in stressful situations. Ie: Grappling hooks, ninja stars, tacks ect...
History: Kazuma was raised in a secret village deep in the mountains, but decided to go into the City instead, once he heard of a school in the city that determined ranking based on strength. He has been training ever since he could remember, and has never really had a life which he could fall back to, if something ever happened.
During Kazuma's final year of training, he overheard some children from the next village over, whispering about a new school that wasn't like any other, A school that ranked it's students based on their combat skills. Kazuma, although his parents disagreed with his decision, decided that after his training had finished, to venture into this new school, in order to test his mettle against these other warriors, but mainly to broarden his combat knowledge.
ID Info
Color:Grey
Avi/Picture: (Just use my "Appearance" face)
Likes: Reading, Silence
Dislikes: Noise, People picking un-needed fights
Sect:Blue
General Info
Name: Kazuma Miyazawa
Age: 22
Title: None.
Class:Assassin
Appearance:
Personality: Kazuma is Cold and distant at first glance. Because of his heritage, he hasn't had the chance to become accustomed to social life untill now. Although he is also calm and collected in battle, there are also times when he doubts himself, and over-compensates, which cause tension between him and most other people he teams up with.
Kazuma also has a split personality, where if struck from behind, or if he goes into into depression, his 'other self' comes out, amplifying his speed. This is usually noticable by his blank expression in his eyes. they will look as if there was no life in his eyes.
Weapons: Kazuma's choice of weaponry consists of 2 katanas, in a Dual Wielding fashion. The first blade has the ability to poison the foe, but only if the suer allows it, hence the poison never gets used in friendly combat within the school compounds, but it is rumoured that when hit with this blade in school, that a burning sensation can still be felt when struck, from the small remnants of poison still left on the blade.
The Second Blade creates steam around the blade, making it appear as if the steam was the blade itself. Whenever the blade cuts the foe, it also makes the opponent feel a burning sensation, although this is caused from the heat generated from the blade which created the steam.
Abilities: Kazuma has the ability to amplify the potency of the poison from his first blade, and the intensity of the heat from the steam of his second blade. He is also resourceful, using his ninja items to help in stressful situations. Ie: Grappling hooks, ninja stars, tacks ect...
History: Kazuma was raised in a secret village deep in the mountains, but decided to go into the City instead, once he heard of a school in the city that determined ranking based on strength. He has been training ever since he could remember, and has never really had a life which he could fall back to, if something ever happened.
During Kazuma's final year of training, he overheard some children from the next village over, whispering about a new school that wasn't like any other, A school that ranked it's students based on their combat skills. Kazuma, although his parents disagreed with his decision, decided that after his training had finished, to venture into this new school, in order to test his mettle against these other warriors, but mainly to broarden his combat knowledge.
ID Info
Color:Grey
Avi/Picture: (Just use my "Appearance" face)
Likes: Reading, Silence
Dislikes: Noise, People picking un-needed fights
Sect:Blue
JAWSH, how is Pharra going to react to Alyss coming back to the dorms rather late? 
~shocked-onigiri~
Clourith Fanboy
i edited it and then noticed what was wanted... i hope the new ones enough...
EDIT: repost to save time
Name: Nami Hitsugiru
Age: 15
Title: Nobody's heartless
Class: Techno wizard
Appearance:
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(before a girl hugs him, below is after a girl hugs him)
Personality:
Nami can come across as rather uptight and he is easily angered, but only when people are new to him, he begins to trust people over time as he gets to know them and gets gradually nicer because of it, Unfortunately Nami has a habit of self-harming because of his past. Nami has been bullied and it causes him to be apprehensive around people, choosing to seclude himself more often than not, though when he is alone his habits come back and he needs people to help him, its like a vicious circle within himself
Weapons: fists (he is a muay thai specialist)
Abilities: Uses his computer to alter the fabric of time and space, but doesnt ever use it because its too dangerous, he can die trying to use it
History: Orphaned as a child due to an attempt to use his power to make life better for his family he went into shock and has stopped speaking entirely he hasnt spoke for 5 years and only recently was his work seen as good enough to get him into the academy without a verbal meeting.
his only attempt to use his full power to its best ability went cataclysmically wrong so its been building up inside him, the only way he knows how to stop it breaking free is by hurting himself due to this he has developed a mental condition called: cognitive impairment, which basically means he has no idea when to stop himself from hurting himself, every ytime he says or does something slightly wrong he cuts himself, he has been in and out of hospital for years due to this
ID Info
Color: blue
Avi/Picture: smaller pic of the headshot of my appearance (not the cat one)
Likes: tuna
Dislikes: rain
Sect: blue
EDIT: repost to save time
Name: Nami Hitsugiru
Age: 15
Title: Nobody's heartless
Class: Techno wizard
Appearance:
(before a girl hugs him, below is after a girl hugs him)
Personality:
Nami can come across as rather uptight and he is easily angered, but only when people are new to him, he begins to trust people over time as he gets to know them and gets gradually nicer because of it, Unfortunately Nami has a habit of self-harming because of his past. Nami has been bullied and it causes him to be apprehensive around people, choosing to seclude himself more often than not, though when he is alone his habits come back and he needs people to help him, its like a vicious circle within himself
Weapons: fists (he is a muay thai specialist)
Abilities: Uses his computer to alter the fabric of time and space, but doesnt ever use it because its too dangerous, he can die trying to use it
History: Orphaned as a child due to an attempt to use his power to make life better for his family he went into shock and has stopped speaking entirely he hasnt spoke for 5 years and only recently was his work seen as good enough to get him into the academy without a verbal meeting.
his only attempt to use his full power to its best ability went cataclysmically wrong so its been building up inside him, the only way he knows how to stop it breaking free is by hurting himself due to this he has developed a mental condition called: cognitive impairment, which basically means he has no idea when to stop himself from hurting himself, every ytime he says or does something slightly wrong he cuts himself, he has been in and out of hospital for years due to this
ID Info
Color: blue
Avi/Picture: smaller pic of the headshot of my appearance (not the cat one)
Likes: tuna
Dislikes: rain
Sect: blue
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JAWSH, how is Pharra going to react to Alyss coming back to the dorms rather late?
I dunno Pharra's a pretty chill character. She's a tomboy who just goes with the flow so she'll just be all "Hey new roomy" and then go study magic somewhere. xD
Edit: Shinya and Nami excepted. (Personality is a pretty important part of a bio. Try making i more in depth next time
)
This year shall be fun... Oli! Orion still needs to meet with Stella and them!
Also, can he say a forgiveness speech at dinner-time and try to lower hostilities?
Also, can he say a forgiveness speech at dinner-time and try to lower hostilities?
Ooh, I was planning to have Vergil study magic a little anyway Oliver, perhaps they could be class partners or something?
Assuming you mean she'll be attending magic classes as well as independant study
Assuming you mean she'll be attending magic classes as well as independant study
I was also thinking about putting Alyss into a magic study class. 
GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY BRAIN
GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY BRAIN
Stella will visit Orion you sooner than you think Shadow xD She's pissed. We should PM...
Pharra wouldn't mind a study buddy or buddies
She's kind of friendless xD
OOh and dorm assignments for the newbies are updated and bio links too(Are you guys even using the bio links?
) .
Pharra wouldn't mind a study buddy or buddies
She's kind of friendless xDOOh and dorm assignments for the newbies are updated and bio links too(Are you guys even using the bio links?
) .