Poetry The Keys That Speak

ElvenAngel

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This was my first (and as of yet only) experiment in Shakespearean sonnets. I always felt it was dedicated to all the people who have long-time, really good friends over the Internet. =) Think about someone you care a lot about, as you read it, whom you've never actually met face to face.



The Keys That Speak

To be sleepless at 4 am, I hate to ponder why.

Perhaps my day has been rotten and glum
I may have lost the bus or decided to cry.
It may have felt long like a snake laid in the sun.
Perhaps I’ve been dwelling in my head
For much too long, as I tend to do.
There’s much to find in an idea’s deep end.
I must have got lost again as I always do.
It’s that wrong turn between here
And a land tuned to Daydream FM.
But there you are, my dear,
I see your name in the list, my friend.

The ocean is nothing but a drop in a teaspoon.
The keys between our hands will speak soon.
 
Okay, I think you're missing probably the most important thing about Shakespearean sonnets, which is the meter. They're written in iambic pentameter. So what you have to do is line up the natural stresses of words with the meter layout.

da DA da DA da DA da DA da DA
u / u / u / u / u /
The birds in misty morning singing clear

Go ahead and try rewriting your poem with this in mind.
 
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