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If you refer to Skyrim as "just a game" again, I might have to do something to you ^^
But yes, I have been forgetting this too long...
There!
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If you refer to Skyrim as "just a game" again, I might have to do something to you ^^
But yes, I have been forgetting this too long...
There!
A crappy post is up!
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Awesome, I'll come up with some ideas now- I have a basic character design in my mind.
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((My bio, post any detail in need of change.))
Name: Lucas “Feanor” Branford
Alias: tends to go under “Feanor” when dealing with elves.
Alignment: Primarily good, can be lead astray due to his naivety.
Class: Mage knight (electrical-or lightning- element.)
Race: Half elf,
Gender: Male
Age: 20
Appearance:
Clothing consists of: short sleeved squared neck block red shirt, navy jacket -long sleeved- no hood-he wears it unzipped most of the time. . Grey coloured gloves. His lower body consists of grey working pants, which aren’t extremely tight or baggy, and on his feet are whitish combat boots.
Armour: red iron shoulder pads, both arms of the jacket. Other than that, naught.
Physical specs: Caucasian. His muscles are prominent, but this is only due to his lean body type. 150 pounds is his weight, long light brown (straw coloured) hair (just hitting his neck) with a slight fringe. Unsightly scars trailing down his left arm and lower back. Height; 5‘11. Barcode tattooed to his neck.
Personality:
Lucas is fairly shy and slightly anti-social, feeling awkward around others-but not to the point of complete isolation. Stemming from abuse from his father, he is extremely rebellious towards authoritarian figures, especially males. Also, due to this mental abuse, he has a fairly pessimistic attitude and-emotionally- he is actually behind in growth, being only around the same area as a 17 year old. Due to this, he can be a whirlwind to deal with… Anger one minute, melancholia the next. Sensitivity is key with him-any kind of insult plays on his mind.
If forced into an argument with another person with superior debating skills, he’ll tend to just shut himself up and not reply. Any caring type would, again, just receive a silent reply. In a cruel twist, he tends to really respond to demanding, autocratic orders or statements, as his father tended to command him.
Another fact of his is that he tends to display emotion with tears, crying was his only relief growing up-after a session from his Father. Due to this, he feels himself inferior to most. Nevertheless, he can still be a noteworthy friend who can-due to his “green” mind- be swayed easier than most.
First Impression: Upon a first impression of Lucas, a person would probably notice those god-awful scars trailing down his arm; they would seem like a type of electrical burn or scald. Other than this, his physical specs would fit those of a slightly short, but bulkier person his race and age. Personality wise, many aged and experienced people would easily notice that twinkle in his eyes, the naivety of youth shining through. While attempting to stir conversation, it wouldn‘t be that hard to get him to speak small talk-but he would shut up as it came to much more intimate speak.
Statistics:
Strength: His strength is fairly average, as he is able to press lift ninety-four pounds. In fighting wise, his strength would be enough to snap a fairly thin plank of hardwood, and wouldn’t do much to a brick wall, except break his hand.
Vitality: His defences against physical attack is that of a normal human, he bleeds, bruises and lacerates extremely easily. Towards magic, he is much more built up in defence due to his own self training(working in the same way that broken bones set stronger than previously) This is not to insane levels, he still prefers to dodge than take strong blasts head on.
Speed: Faster than that of an human, but within reasonable levels Roughly 45 MPH(high build up, short battle charge) and 15 MPH long distance running(average)-due to his prime conditioning from training. Speed is his key- his sidestepping technique is considered “swift” and his attacks are usually fast combinations of sword slashes.
Stamina: easily his weakest point. He IS athletic, but only to a certain degree. He can jog cross country for many Kilometres, but he cannot keep up his fastest pace of 20 MPH for very long, so it varies throughout his travelling. He hasn‘t a very high tolerance to physical pain.
Reflexes: Fast, it’s his outstanding physical feature. Due to his training, it would probably match-or even pass- an elite soldier. But, Due to it being linked with instincts, he tends to rely on it and can feel naked and exposed if it is completely out-matched. His coordination is precise; he is no bumbling idiot or clumsy male.
Fighting Style: His fighting style is a mixture of “hit and run” swordplay and self taught experience. He is apt with long range attacks, but his mastery is close range. The training he received from his father influences his attacks, meaning they can be fairly brutal and bloodthirsty. As for his most lethal attacks, they come under his “Six Sword arts” genre.
Weapons: His only weapon is Orchist: a long-sword., its specific quality is mainly the fact that magic can freely flow through it and allow the user to disperse magic from it. The hilt glows a different colour, symbolising what magic is being channelled into it: Yellow for Lightning, green for non-elemental and a white for a mixture of both. It is made of enchanted steal, but it‘s condition is that of a well preserved plain blade. Its sharp potency can be increased upon the addition of electrical currents one of the drawbacks is: when Lightning is flowed into the blade, the blade itself becomes dull afterwards-meaning regular care is needed.
Abilities:
Two ‘physical’ Sword art: The first two of the techniques of his “sword art” fall under the genre of master swordplay, and take a severe toll on his physical stamina. Both use magical power.
“Orchirst’s battle cry” involves trapping the opponent in within a “circle” (by this, its is Lucas himself cutting off the opponent) moving along as to push them against the “walls” of the short area and stagger them into stumbling to the other side, forcing a chain of attacks- hopefully being able to inflict heavy wounds. Most effective when combined with “Lightning Body”.
“The music of Manwe” involves his speed and dexterity with his blade taking control. It is the best showcase for his swordsmanship, as it is lacks any use of magic. The sword is slashed in a mixture of swipes as he passes by the opponent, the air penetration of the speeding blade creating different tunes like a song. Can be empowered with “Lightning body”.
Magic:
His magical attacks take a heavy toll on his spiritual energy and can actually kill him if overused. His limit is fairly high, but not to an unimaginable level. He can only use part of his potential before he feels the effects. It affects him in the same way that physical fatigue does. As an added effect, the continuous use of Lightning can begin to burn his skin fiercely.
Non elemental, RUIN spell: create large, dark-green coloured bursts/ waves that explode on impact. Can also focus this into his weapon to fire slashes. Usually taxing, this shows signs of fatigue if used to regularly at optimum strength. By weakening the blasts considerably, he can get away with slight panting. This would be like being hit by a distant shotgun burst.
Lightning: This allows him to channel energy in electrical magic. Can be used to power attacks, to increase his speed (this is done by the flowing of magical energy into his muscles. It increases reaction and movement speed of these by acting like a sort of “Hyper adrenaline”) and be used in projectile form, as above with the RUIN spell. As a short summary it is easily the most taxing on his body. An explanation of the different spells he can cast is below.
THUNDER BULLETS: Yellow in colour. He creates a sphere of lightning around his fist, from which a number of small, yet destructive lightning orbs is fired towards his enemy at high speed. When used in this form, he can fire five of these orbs from his hand. Like the RUIN spell, it is like a distant shotgun burst-slightly electrified.
He Can also generate smaller balls of lightning on his fingers, which he sends flying at his target. At most, he can fire three bullets from each finger of one hand, since he can’t use the hand welding his weapon. After using this spell, he would be panting as if coming from a light walk. He is usually able to cast this quickly after the first spell, with only minutes between the two. The damage from these would be like getting hit by needles.
Lightning Storm: Yellow: He creates a sphere of lightning in his hands that sends lightning bolt in every direction- is usually liable to hit comrades and can injure himself if the attack gets out of hand. It can be conducted by metal quite easily. The radius of the attack is roughly 3-4 metres.
After using this spell, his heart rate skyrockets and his breathing increases to the pace of a 100 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. As the first cast, he can use it again roughly twenty minutes later, depending on backlash. This would be like getting struck with high voltage shocks in succession.
Lightning body: Yellow aura covers his body. Easily the most taxing on his body, he can transmute his body’s magical flow into electric type energy, speeding him up to extremely high levels. However, a recharge is felt right after usage and he can suffer a numbing effect in his limbs for some time afterwards. At the same time, it’s extremely lethal; it can cause nerve damage upon impact with an opponent’s body. At a time, this spell can only be in action for roughly 10-20 minutes before it begins to damage the nerve cells of his body. Also, it actually causes his magic to become inactive for the equal length used in by the enhanced form. The body Fatigue from this spell is the same as a 1600 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter.
Five ‘spiritual’ Sword art: (All electrical attacks are blue in colour)
“Morgoths furious rhapsody.”
This consists of Lucas creating three pillars of electrical and non-elemental magical energy, which speed towards a singular opponent- trapping them in three prongs before crashing in towards each other. He creates these pillars by an uppercut slash, along with the discharge of energy. The attack is quite powerful, but only slightly more than Lightning Storm. Fatigue from this would be the same as a 400 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. The effect of this attack would be like getting shocked by an open power cable.
“Gil-galad’s grand requiem”
This consists of Lucas slashing downwards vertically, until the blade crashes to ground. Doing this cause numerous, weak RUIN bursts to fire from the impact of the weapon against the ground- flying parallel to the ground towards his enemies.
The amount of spells fired is the main bulk of the fatigue from this attack-the number is in the hundreds. Fatigue equals a 600 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. The effect on receiving body would be like getting riddled with a number of barbs.
“Feanor’s passionate solo”
By focusing his magical potential into one attack, this technique is born. Lucas speeds towards the opponent and-with an abrupt stop to the charge- the blade is pulled across in a swift slash across. By doing this, three to four arcs of Lightning are fired towards the enemy, in a forward direction the attack is covering ground at the pace of a lightning strike, and the arcs do not touch he ground unless conducted by metal.
Very lethal, it can cause serious nerve damage and numbness in both Lucas’s wielding arm and the parts of the body struck by the attack. Roughly the same amount the fatigue as a 1600m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter.
“Frodo’s nine-fingered finale”
His most destructive attack. By gathering up EVERY single cell of his mage-potent energy into his left arm then slamming the ground with said hand, he can create 8 other, mixed magic doppelgangers’ of himself-complete with lightning “Orchirst’s”- that run towards the enemy in a kamikaze motion. The copies charge at the enemies and explode one after the other, at optimum times. The power of this would be the same as bombs blowing up right beside a person
The downside of this attack is the monumental energy it takes. The use of such an attack actually inflicts heavy burns to the arm, reduces Lucas magical power to inactivity and actually damages the nerves in such a way that movement is pure agony. The strength of this attack is so tiring that, almost immediately after casting, Lucas would probably collapse.
Other Skills:
Cookery: He is a fairly skilled chef, being able to create eatable meals with even the worst ingredients. However, presentation is not his strong suit- be prepared for things to be slopped into bowls, or onto plates.
History: Born in an outcast family of a man and female elf, the group would have been feared in the area that they were located, a small human village beside the river Gaugamila. This led to a dysfunctional marriage between the two: With Lucas-or “Feanor’s”- mother feeling the terrible brunt of the people’s insults. They had the un-luck to live in such an ignorant area. Eventually-when Lucas was 5 years old his mother abandoned him. This caused his father an emotional breakdown and forced his father to care for him. His father began to become cold and distant until-on the boy’s seventh birthday- he snapped. He had a sick epiphany: that it was his child’s fault for his beloved leaving, and her later death-killed for hybrid breeding.
Due to this, he began to subject him to emotional and physical abuse. At this time, he also trained him- hopefully to kill those who took the boys mother. He was creating a cycle of hatred through his boy. Lucas was shunned as a child, and then beaten for daring to “leave” the house to play. The dehumanising pain the boy bore as a child was the embodiment of hell for him. Yet, it was the man’s stupidity in giving the youth the tools of defence. As he reached the tender age of 15, the boy turned on him and attacked, barely leaving him alive.
Following this, Lucas knew he had to leave. Taking his father’s sword and his mother’s diary- the only memento of her left in the house-“Feanor” left this village, in search of his own kindred. Years pass, skills are gained… He masters his own respective element in this time, along with developing general magical abilities. Through reading that diary, he learns of an epic tale which his mother had quoted from. From this, he took the names of his “sword Art”. Spending this time in isolation from others stunted his social growth, stopped his gain in trusting outlook.
Eventually, after years of complete loneliness, he grew the need to gain company of others. He leaves his surroundings-the southern forests of the centre island of Boletaria- for the wide world, the enjoyment of company… and to find himself.
Starting Location: Just outside sturmhalten. He would be packing up on some food in the town, planning his next course of action before setting off from the village. He has no idea of the hellish outbreak currently going on in the town, but-due to his nature- he hasn’t entered to village yet.
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Name: Lucas “Feanor” Branford
Alias: tends to go under “Feanor” when dealing with elves.
Alignment: Primarily good, can be lead astray due to his naivety.
Class: Mage knight (electrical-or lightning- element.)
Race: Half elf,
Gender: Male
Age: 20
Appearance:
Clothing consists of: short sleeved squared neck block red shirt, navy jacket -long sleeved- no hood-he wears it unzipped most of the time. . Grey coloured gloves. His lower body consists of grey working pants, which aren’t extremely tight or baggy, and on his feet are whitish combat boots.
Armour: red iron shoulder pads, both arms of the jacket. Other than that, naught.
Physical specs: Caucasian. His muscles are prominent, but this is only due to his lean body type. 150 pounds is his weight, long light brown (straw coloured) hair (just hitting his neck) with a slight fringe. Unsightly scars trailing down his left arm and lower back. Height; 5‘11. Barcode tattooed to his neck.
Personality:
Lucas is fairly shy and slightly anti-social, feeling awkward around others-but not to the point of complete isolation. Stemming from abuse from his father, he is extremely rebellious towards authoritarian figures, especially males. Also, due to this mental abuse, he has a fairly pessimistic attitude and-emotionally- he is actually behind in growth, being only around the same area as a 17 year old. Due to this, he can be a whirlwind to deal with… Anger one minute, melancholia the next. Sensitivity is key with him-any kind of insult plays on his mind.
If forced into an argument with another person with superior debating skills, he’ll tend to just shut himself up and not reply. Any caring type would, again, just receive a silent reply. In a cruel twist, he tends to really respond to demanding, autocratic orders or statements, as his father tended to command him.
Another fact of his is that he tends to display emotion with tears, crying was his only relief growing up-after a session from his Father. Due to this, he feels himself inferior to most. Nevertheless, he can still be a noteworthy friend who can-due to his “green” mind- be swayed easier than most.
First Impression: Upon a first impression of Lucas, a person would probably notice those god-awful scars trailing down his arm; they would seem like a type of electrical burn or scald. Other than this, his physical specs would fit those of a slightly short, but bulkier person his race and age. Personality wise, many aged and experienced people would easily notice that twinkle in his eyes, the naivety of youth shining through. While attempting to stir conversation, it wouldn‘t be that hard to get him to speak small talk-but he would shut up as it came to much more intimate speak.
Statistics:
Strength: His strength is fairly average, as he is able to press lift ninety-four pounds. In fighting wise, his strength would be enough to snap a fairly thin plank of hardwood, and wouldn’t do much to a brick wall, except break his hand.
Vitality: His defences against physical attack is that of a normal human, he bleeds, bruises and lacerates extremely easily. Towards magic, he is much more built up in defence due to his own self training(working in the same way that broken bones set stronger than previously) This is not to insane levels, he still prefers to dodge than take strong blasts head on.
Speed: Faster than that of an human, but within reasonable levels Roughly 45 MPH(high build up, short battle charge) and 15 MPH long distance running(average)-due to his prime conditioning from training. Speed is his key- his sidestepping technique is considered “swift” and his attacks are usually fast combinations of sword slashes.
Stamina: easily his weakest point. He IS athletic, but only to a certain degree. He can jog cross country for many Kilometres, but he cannot keep up his fastest pace of 20 MPH for very long, so it varies throughout his travelling. He hasn‘t a very high tolerance to physical pain.
Reflexes: Fast, it’s his outstanding physical feature. Due to his training, it would probably match-or even pass- an elite soldier. But, Due to it being linked with instincts, he tends to rely on it and can feel naked and exposed if it is completely out-matched. His coordination is precise; he is no bumbling idiot or clumsy male.
Fighting Style: His fighting style is a mixture of “hit and run” swordplay and self taught experience. He is apt with long range attacks, but his mastery is close range. The training he received from his father influences his attacks, meaning they can be fairly brutal and bloodthirsty. As for his most lethal attacks, they come under his “Six Sword arts” genre.
Weapons: His only weapon is Orchist: a long-sword., its specific quality is mainly the fact that magic can freely flow through it and allow the user to disperse magic from it. The hilt glows a different colour, symbolising what magic is being channelled into it: Yellow for Lightning, green for non-elemental and a white for a mixture of both. It is made of enchanted steal, but it‘s condition is that of a well preserved plain blade. Its sharp potency can be increased upon the addition of electrical currents one of the drawbacks is: when Lightning is flowed into the blade, the blade itself becomes dull afterwards-meaning regular care is needed.
Abilities:
Two ‘physical’ Sword art: The first two of the techniques of his “sword art” fall under the genre of master swordplay, and take a severe toll on his physical stamina. Both use magical power.
“Orchirst’s battle cry” involves trapping the opponent in within a “circle” (by this, its is Lucas himself cutting off the opponent) moving along as to push them against the “walls” of the short area and stagger them into stumbling to the other side, forcing a chain of attacks- hopefully being able to inflict heavy wounds. Most effective when combined with “Lightning Body”.
“The music of Manwe” involves his speed and dexterity with his blade taking control. It is the best showcase for his swordsmanship, as it is lacks any use of magic. The sword is slashed in a mixture of swipes as he passes by the opponent, the air penetration of the speeding blade creating different tunes like a song. Can be empowered with “Lightning body”.
Magic:
His magical attacks take a heavy toll on his spiritual energy and can actually kill him if overused. His limit is fairly high, but not to an unimaginable level. He can only use part of his potential before he feels the effects. It affects him in the same way that physical fatigue does. As an added effect, the continuous use of Lightning can begin to burn his skin fiercely.
Non elemental, RUIN spell: create large, dark-green coloured bursts/ waves that explode on impact. Can also focus this into his weapon to fire slashes. Usually taxing, this shows signs of fatigue if used to regularly at optimum strength. By weakening the blasts considerably, he can get away with slight panting. This would be like being hit by a distant shotgun burst.
Lightning: This allows him to channel energy in electrical magic. Can be used to power attacks, to increase his speed (this is done by the flowing of magical energy into his muscles. It increases reaction and movement speed of these by acting like a sort of “Hyper adrenaline”) and be used in projectile form, as above with the RUIN spell. As a short summary it is easily the most taxing on his body. An explanation of the different spells he can cast is below.
THUNDER BULLETS: Yellow in colour. He creates a sphere of lightning around his fist, from which a number of small, yet destructive lightning orbs is fired towards his enemy at high speed. When used in this form, he can fire five of these orbs from his hand. Like the RUIN spell, it is like a distant shotgun burst-slightly electrified.
He Can also generate smaller balls of lightning on his fingers, which he sends flying at his target. At most, he can fire three bullets from each finger of one hand, since he can’t use the hand welding his weapon. After using this spell, he would be panting as if coming from a light walk. He is usually able to cast this quickly after the first spell, with only minutes between the two. The damage from these would be like getting hit by needles.
Lightning Storm: Yellow: He creates a sphere of lightning in his hands that sends lightning bolt in every direction- is usually liable to hit comrades and can injure himself if the attack gets out of hand. It can be conducted by metal quite easily. The radius of the attack is roughly 3-4 metres.
After using this spell, his heart rate skyrockets and his breathing increases to the pace of a 100 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. As the first cast, he can use it again roughly twenty minutes later, depending on backlash. This would be like getting struck with high voltage shocks in succession.
Lightning body: Yellow aura covers his body. Easily the most taxing on his body, he can transmute his body’s magical flow into electric type energy, speeding him up to extremely high levels. However, a recharge is felt right after usage and he can suffer a numbing effect in his limbs for some time afterwards. At the same time, it’s extremely lethal; it can cause nerve damage upon impact with an opponent’s body. At a time, this spell can only be in action for roughly 10-20 minutes before it begins to damage the nerve cells of his body. Also, it actually causes his magic to become inactive for the equal length used in by the enhanced form. The body Fatigue from this spell is the same as a 1600 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter.
Five ‘spiritual’ Sword art: (All electrical attacks are blue in colour)
“Morgoths furious rhapsody.”
This consists of Lucas creating three pillars of electrical and non-elemental magical energy, which speed towards a singular opponent- trapping them in three prongs before crashing in towards each other. He creates these pillars by an uppercut slash, along with the discharge of energy. The attack is quite powerful, but only slightly more than Lightning Storm. Fatigue from this would be the same as a 400 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. The effect of this attack would be like getting shocked by an open power cable.
“Gil-galad’s grand requiem”
This consists of Lucas slashing downwards vertically, until the blade crashes to ground. Doing this cause numerous, weak RUIN bursts to fire from the impact of the weapon against the ground- flying parallel to the ground towards his enemies.
The amount of spells fired is the main bulk of the fatigue from this attack-the number is in the hundreds. Fatigue equals a 600 m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter. The effect on receiving body would be like getting riddled with a number of barbs.
“Feanor’s passionate solo”
By focusing his magical potential into one attack, this technique is born. Lucas speeds towards the opponent and-with an abrupt stop to the charge- the blade is pulled across in a swift slash across. By doing this, three to four arcs of Lightning are fired towards the enemy, in a forward direction the attack is covering ground at the pace of a lightning strike, and the arcs do not touch he ground unless conducted by metal.
Very lethal, it can cause serious nerve damage and numbness in both Lucas’s wielding arm and the parts of the body struck by the attack. Roughly the same amount the fatigue as a 1600m sprint attempted by an untrained sprinter.
“Frodo’s nine-fingered finale”
His most destructive attack. By gathering up EVERY single cell of his mage-potent energy into his left arm then slamming the ground with said hand, he can create 8 other, mixed magic doppelgangers’ of himself-complete with lightning “Orchirst’s”- that run towards the enemy in a kamikaze motion. The copies charge at the enemies and explode one after the other, at optimum times. The power of this would be the same as bombs blowing up right beside a person
The downside of this attack is the monumental energy it takes. The use of such an attack actually inflicts heavy burns to the arm, reduces Lucas magical power to inactivity and actually damages the nerves in such a way that movement is pure agony. The strength of this attack is so tiring that, almost immediately after casting, Lucas would probably collapse.
Other Skills:
Cookery: He is a fairly skilled chef, being able to create eatable meals with even the worst ingredients. However, presentation is not his strong suit- be prepared for things to be slopped into bowls, or onto plates.
History: Born in an outcast family of a man and female elf, the group would have been feared in the area that they were located, a small human village beside the river Gaugamila. This led to a dysfunctional marriage between the two: With Lucas-or “Feanor’s”- mother feeling the terrible brunt of the people’s insults. They had the un-luck to live in such an ignorant area. Eventually-when Lucas was 5 years old his mother abandoned him. This caused his father an emotional breakdown and forced his father to care for him. His father began to become cold and distant until-on the boy’s seventh birthday- he snapped. He had a sick epiphany: that it was his child’s fault for his beloved leaving, and her later death-killed for hybrid breeding.
Due to this, he began to subject him to emotional and physical abuse. At this time, he also trained him- hopefully to kill those who took the boys mother. He was creating a cycle of hatred through his boy. Lucas was shunned as a child, and then beaten for daring to “leave” the house to play. The dehumanising pain the boy bore as a child was the embodiment of hell for him. Yet, it was the man’s stupidity in giving the youth the tools of defence. As he reached the tender age of 15, the boy turned on him and attacked, barely leaving him alive.
Following this, Lucas knew he had to leave. Taking his father’s sword and his mother’s diary- the only memento of her left in the house-“Feanor” left this village, in search of his own kindred. Years pass, skills are gained… He masters his own respective element in this time, along with developing general magical abilities. Through reading that diary, he learns of an epic tale which his mother had quoted from. From this, he took the names of his “sword Art”. Spending this time in isolation from others stunted his social growth, stopped his gain in trusting outlook.
Eventually, after years of complete loneliness, he grew the need to gain company of others. He leaves his surroundings-the southern forests of the centre island of Boletaria- for the wide world, the enjoyment of company… and to find himself.
Starting Location: Just outside sturmhalten. He would be packing up on some food in the town, planning his next course of action before setting off from the village. He has no idea of the hellish outbreak currently going on in the town, but-due to his nature- he hasn’t entered to village yet.
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OK!
New character for me, one that is more fun to use for my sake, and.. stuff...
LINKEH!
Iras Aedari alongside Scelus, take note that this other 'thing' is NOT just another personality as in Multiple personality disorder, this is actually a different presence.
New character for me, one that is more fun to use for my sake, and.. stuff...
LINKEH!
Iras Aedari alongside Scelus, take note that this other 'thing' is NOT just another personality as in Multiple personality disorder, this is actually a different presence.
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ElvenAngel
I forget stuff because I had to make room in my he
Woohoo~ new chars.
Now, Meteora. I need you to clean the bio up quite a bit, because there's lots of formatting problems and there are some things that need more in depth changing because they're either a little over powered or not exactly clear. Or loopholes that need more explanation.
I'll take the opportunity to warn you that most of the players here are very experienced. I'll hope to see more detail put into this character as we progress. :3 I'll be helping as much as I can.
I've asked Hera Ledro and Red Fox to pitch in this so you'll probably hear from them too.
First of all, in the actual bio, I really need you to remove the placeholder info that were in the template; the [...] bits need to go because they're confusing. Try not to use italics or bold for the main text either.
Like so, the brackets need to go.
Hmm, Mystics and mage knights are different classes... so um, pick one way of saying it or further explain.
First of all, careful with the overuse of colons and stuff. Second...well you're a bit confusing. Physical specs is the general appearance and attire should be a separate paragraph. I think armor should a different paragraph. Try to put some more detail into his clothes and appearance too. Like what pants he's got on and some facial details. As far as I can tell, as a part elf he shouldn't be overly bulky, but its a strictly personal opinion.
The Personality tab is alright, it just needs a little brushing up, cleaning and expansion. Just try to visualize his reaction in different situations.
The First Impressions just needs to be a little smaller and streamlined, without over-analysis.
Technically pressing and lifting one's body weight isn't average, but rather above average... I guess the way you describe it further on makes sense, but keep in mind that average strength is well below one's body weight.
With Vitality--how much more defended is he against magic? Magic defense is not a bad thing, but don't make it too high. He shouldn't really be able to shrug off magic like nothing because...well, it's magic... Also, 'plain magical blasts' is a little too vague. You gotta be a little more specific with that.
Here I just need you to explain what you mean by 'long' swordplay. It's a little confusing.
Okay, first of all, you need to describe what the sword looks like, or even provide a picture. You also need to explain in a little more detail how and why magic can channel through it.
Again, this section needs quite a bit of brushing up and more explanations as to how these world. For instance, in the Battle Cry one, what kind of circle is it? Is it a magical, physical or imaginary circle? How do you keep them contained?
The Manwe one--what do you mean when you say the blade takes control? Does the sword literally come to life and take control or is it that he just leads with the sword?
Okay, a general note about magic. You need to be a lot more detailed and specific because there's a lot of loop-holes. I'd appreciate it if, instead of numbers and percentages, you told us how drained he FEELS, as in what toll it takes on his body in terms of exhaustion and whether he can cast it again. Not a cooldown time, but rather in terms of whether he feels up to casting it again. Also tell us what others should expect upon feeling when hit by them. Expand a little bit on each spell as much as you can.
The last one is the one I'm more concerned about because it seems a tad overpowered and a little confusing. Perhaps a little more explanation, again...
Well overall that's the big stuff. If anybody else has some suggestions, feel free to pitch in. We're a democracy here (largely...).
As for Fox's char... well let's just say I've already been over that quite a few times with him already. We're good.
Now, Meteora. I need you to clean the bio up quite a bit, because there's lots of formatting problems and there are some things that need more in depth changing because they're either a little over powered or not exactly clear. Or loopholes that need more explanation.
I'll take the opportunity to warn you that most of the players here are very experienced. I'll hope to see more detail put into this character as we progress. :3 I'll be helping as much as I can.
I've asked Hera Ledro and Red Fox to pitch in this so you'll probably hear from them too.
First of all, in the actual bio, I really need you to remove the placeholder info that were in the template; the [...] bits need to go because they're confusing. Try not to use italics or bold for the main text either.
Like so, the brackets need to go.
Hmm, Mystics and mage knights are different classes... so um, pick one way of saying it or further explain.
First of all, careful with the overuse of colons and stuff. Second...well you're a bit confusing. Physical specs is the general appearance and attire should be a separate paragraph. I think armor should a different paragraph. Try to put some more detail into his clothes and appearance too. Like what pants he's got on and some facial details. As far as I can tell, as a part elf he shouldn't be overly bulky, but its a strictly personal opinion.
The Personality tab is alright, it just needs a little brushing up, cleaning and expansion. Just try to visualize his reaction in different situations.
The First Impressions just needs to be a little smaller and streamlined, without over-analysis.
Technically pressing and lifting one's body weight isn't average, but rather above average... I guess the way you describe it further on makes sense, but keep in mind that average strength is well below one's body weight.
With Vitality--how much more defended is he against magic? Magic defense is not a bad thing, but don't make it too high. He shouldn't really be able to shrug off magic like nothing because...well, it's magic... Also, 'plain magical blasts' is a little too vague. You gotta be a little more specific with that.
Here I just need you to explain what you mean by 'long' swordplay. It's a little confusing.
Okay, first of all, you need to describe what the sword looks like, or even provide a picture. You also need to explain in a little more detail how and why magic can channel through it.
Again, this section needs quite a bit of brushing up and more explanations as to how these world. For instance, in the Battle Cry one, what kind of circle is it? Is it a magical, physical or imaginary circle? How do you keep them contained?
The Manwe one--what do you mean when you say the blade takes control? Does the sword literally come to life and take control or is it that he just leads with the sword?
Okay, a general note about magic. You need to be a lot more detailed and specific because there's a lot of loop-holes. I'd appreciate it if, instead of numbers and percentages, you told us how drained he FEELS, as in what toll it takes on his body in terms of exhaustion and whether he can cast it again. Not a cooldown time, but rather in terms of whether he feels up to casting it again. Also tell us what others should expect upon feeling when hit by them. Expand a little bit on each spell as much as you can.
Increasing one's speed with electricity doesn't make much sense so you might wanna explain in a little more detail how that works. I'd rather state that it takes a large amount of power for him to cast this spell and it drains him. The cooldown can be how long it takes him to 'recharge' so to speak.
I'd prefer if you could state how many he can create at a time, and make it a finite number, otherwise this is a bit overpowered. I assume this is something he can spam alot so it's ok if this is a technique that doesn't exhaust him a lot. Remember, please no numbers.
So is it possible that he can get hit as well? You might wanna get a little more specific as to the radius of this how far someone has to be to be safe from it. Does metal attract this more? Can this be grounded and neutralized?
Again, the lightning-to-speed thing needs more clarification and I think the first spell has a similar effect. Is it pretty much like a very severe static-shock or a full-blown electrocution? If this is his strongest spell, I assume he can only use it once in a while, so you might wanna state that it exhausts him.
Again, a little better formatting and a little more explaining to what everything does and how tiring it is to cast.
The last one is the one I'm more concerned about because it seems a tad overpowered and a little confusing. Perhaps a little more explanation, again...
Well overall that's the big stuff. If anybody else has some suggestions, feel free to pitch in. We're a democracy here (largely...).
As for Fox's char... well let's just say I've already been over that quite a few times with him already. We're good.
*Dragon Mage appears*
@Hera, @Exocraet...... you have been lax in your posting......
@Hera, @Exocraet...... you have been lax in your posting......
@ElevenAngel:
Thanks for reading it over. Honestly, I'm glad you picked out those mistakes as I tend to over-estimate abilities and whatnot when it comes to characers
I'll edit the blog now and get it back to you A.S.A.P??
Also, I have a manga crop which would probably outline was his clothing apears like, aswell as the sword, would this help with the discription of him??
Thanks for reading it over. Honestly, I'm glad you picked out those mistakes as I tend to over-estimate abilities and whatnot when it comes to characers
I'll edit the blog now and get it back to you A.S.A.P??Also, I have a manga crop which would probably outline was his clothing apears like, aswell as the sword, would this help with the discription of him??
I'm on it, I'm on it. Cut me some slack, the hospital visit damn near killed me and then it almost killed me again when I got the bill. The American "health care" system is a joke.
WHOA, WHOA, WHOA. Hold the phone.
Hospital visit?
I had no idea about any hospital visit! D: I'm so sorry! God, I like an indecent pile of shit. D: Are you okay? Everything alright?
*pats* Alas, with all the overhauls of the system going on, you're always the butt of the joke. D:
Meh, I'm okay now. But I was experiencing sever abdominal pain. When I went to the doctor, they had to remove my gallbladder. So I was in the hospital for a week. Don't worry about feeling bad about it. I didn't mean to sound annoyed or anything, it just came off that way. My apologies.
But yeah, I've still got the stitches, but I'm all good and I haven't had any pain since.
Well, except for the $38,000 hospital bill.
AMERICA; FUCK YEAH
But yeah, I've still got the stitches, but I'm all good and I haven't had any pain since.
Well, except for the $38,000 hospital bill.
AMERICA; FUCK YEAH
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Well glad to hear your alright now though D:,I'll agree that America's Health care blows =/
I'll post once everyone's gathered around the exit
Well glad to hear your alright now though D:,I'll agree that America's Health care blows =/
I'll post once everyone's gathered around the exit
@Exocraet: OW! Damn, I can understand that'd be hard on you. Well, I hope you recover and are back to your old ass-kicking self soon! D: I'd suffer from withdrawal if you ever dropped from the site! Then we'd both be miserable and bitchy. 
38 grand.... that's rough. >.< I'm not gonna say anything about the health system though because I don't want to bring in any politics. <_< But needless to say, that's really rough. I hope things ease up on ya.
xAaronx: Everyone's already gathered around the entrance, we're good to go. Post NOWZ.
Well, I hope you recover and are back to your old ass-kicking self soon! D: I'd suffer from withdrawal if you ever dropped from the site! Then we'd both be miserable and bitchy. 38 grand.... that's rough. >.< I'm not gonna say anything about the health system though because I don't want to bring in any politics. <_< But needless to say, that's really rough. I hope things ease up on ya.
xAaronx: Everyone's already gathered around the entrance, we're good to go. Post NOWZ.
Look at caitlin, taking over as director of directions. :licky:
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@ Zipper: >_> She IS a GM, you know... She's got permit to do that.
@ Meteora: Don't mention it hon, that's what we're here for. ^^
@ Exocraet: D: Sweetie, I hope you have a speedy recovery. *hugs* I completely understand how you feel. The Greek health care system is shite too.
ANYWAY PEOPLE! We're almost ready to jump to the next arc. We're going to exit the city and then Jon will jump us to the next destination: STURMHALTEN!
It's a town between Morris and Hag's Point on the map (I will update that asap). To make a long story short... zombie outbreak. There will be SOME survivors, but it's up to you all if we're gonna be the heroes or just save our own skins, hehe.
It's also where new characters shall be introduced--take note of this Meteora and Red Fox and decide how your char got there and what they're up to. No need to get over-detailed, since we will reveal the cause of the zombies and ect situation once we get there--but I WILL take your ideas into account.
@ Meteora: Don't mention it hon, that's what we're here for. ^^
@ Exocraet: D: Sweetie, I hope you have a speedy recovery. *hugs* I completely understand how you feel. The Greek health care system is shite too.
ANYWAY PEOPLE! We're almost ready to jump to the next arc. We're going to exit the city and then Jon will jump us to the next destination: STURMHALTEN!
It's a town between Morris and Hag's Point on the map (I will update that asap). To make a long story short... zombie outbreak. There will be SOME survivors, but it's up to you all if we're gonna be the heroes or just save our own skins, hehe.
It's also where new characters shall be introduced--take note of this Meteora and Red Fox and decide how your char got there and what they're up to. No need to get over-detailed, since we will reveal the cause of the zombies and ect situation once we get there--but I WILL take your ideas into account.
I have already told you the reason for my char to be there, if you have forgotten it I will stab you over Skype with it again ^^
*Sees you on skype, goes to poke right after I enter this post*
Zipper said:
You know you like it.
There you are! I edited my bio comment, instead of posting another one. I also added a crop picture, so that the jist of his depiction is understanble.