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Yeah, but I'm still pissed. And not at that. I was, to my knowledge, one of the few on FFF that was trying to find a counter-hacker and fix the system, but I got kicked out of the shoutbox for talking to Angelus about the problem.
Anywho, what's new? anything on Frenzy or Julius since the hack?
Anywho, what's new? anything on Frenzy or Julius since the hack?
Positing this by strick orders of drachman so all spamwarnings should be directed there...
"What?"
I'll get my bio updated a whee bit(flavor mostly) and then toss it to the mods for mangling and approval...
It got approved with only minute mangling! http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/hall-of-warriors/firefrenzys-stash-6781-page3.html#post196651
"What?"
I'll get my bio updated a whee bit(flavor mostly) and then toss it to the mods for mangling and approval...
It got approved with only minute mangling! http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/hall-of-warriors/firefrenzys-stash-6781-page3.html#post196651
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FireFrenzy - Nova Carmine
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I really don't have much complaints here. I love how you talked about her appearance like you wanted to...ahem...you know.
The only thing I have a little problem with is the one where you can see if they're under mind control and stuff like that, but even then, that's alright.
[APPROVED]
I really don't have much complaints here. I love how you talked about her appearance like you wanted to...ahem...you know.
The only thing I have a little problem with is the one where you can see if they're under mind control and stuff like that, but even then, that's alright.
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Name: Hudson Ortusk
Age: 21
Height: 6'1
Weight: 160
Build:Wiry and flexible, yet athletic
Class: Powerhunter (but knows one minor spell for cleaning his clothes)
Description:
Hair- Shaved (used to be curly)
Eyes- a brilliant emerald green
Ethnicity-African American
Skin color- a deep caramel brown
Complexion: Hudson has fairly soft skin. Except for his hands and feet. Both of which being firm and calloused from years of use. Beneath the soft skin however, lies the feel of a fighter, with his hardened muscles (whatever muscle he has) He doesn't have much body hair either. He doesn't know why, but the gods saw fit not to bless him with any facial, chest, leg or forearm hair. He does at the least have (albeit little) hair in the one area that proves tha he's a man.
...And he's still attractive enough to get him into constant trouble with women.
Clothing:
Upper body- A plain white dress shirt, with it's sleeves rolled up past the elbows, and a black pinstriped suit vest.
Head-A black pinstriped fedora. There's a small knife concealed on the inside of his hat.
Legs- Comfortably fitting, black pinstriped suit pants.
Feet- Black pinstriped dress shoes with silk lining and arch support for comfort
Forearms- Steel bracers with a soft leather interior lining.
Misc- Hudson does in fact have the black pinstriped suit coat that came with the rest of the suit. Incidentally, he really only uses it for style, and concealing his blade in public, which is housed in a wooden sheath.
Personality: Hudson's personality is very bubbly (usually depending on how good or energetic he's feeling). He's well-known to be both light-hearted or carefree, and stern, reserved, and taciturn. Though he is greatly appreciative of the better things in both life and us. Necessity has found a home in his heart, as he almost always puts what he needs over what he desires. It's not uncommon of him to shun precious time with friends in order to further sharpen his skills or hone his senses. Deep down, he's a man that wants to gets things done. He thinks that he needs to be strong in order to do that; a reason for the fact that rarely shows sadness, and never cries.
First impression: Hudson is the type of person people usually want to spend a bit more time around (usually). Perhaps it lies in his friendliness? He generally tends to be very good-natured, and very laid-back around strangers. Circumstances for him usually dictate that he's wandering around without a clue, which is something others find a bit amusing. He's a good listener too, and enjoys hearing people's storie. Or perhaps it's that there's more to him than meets the eye? Maybe there's more to him than he himself knows?
He's almost always up for a good laugh, and prepared to look stylish in whatever he does. Though that doesn' t mean that he's afraid of getting messy. One of the things that's he's tried to make a point of is not letting things bother him too much. But that doesn't necessarily say that things don't bother him.
He's genrally a lover of fights and getting stronger, and yet -and here is the interesting part- never goes about picking fights unless he's steamed or deems it necessary.
Fighting Style: Hudson doesn't really use a martial arts style per se, but he does have a way of fighting. Hudson's style emphasizes agility, flexibility, unpredictability, wildness, and strength, though not necessarily in that order. His "style" is more than reminiscent of Capoeira and B-boying. And rightly so, as he's more than dabbled in the above. Strangely enough, he's a spectacular swordsman, combining bladeplay harmoniously with his own hand-to-hand fighting style, though he hasn't had any training with a blade at all. His skills with a blade come from hard-fought battles, necessity, and doing what comes best. Fortunately, he was smart enough to combine them all into his own personal style that he calls Estillo De Reino.
Note: Hudson will only throw or use his switchblades in tight situations.
But make one thing certain: He will always fight for whawt's both right and necessary.
Weapons: Two full-black 5 inch (the blade itself is 4 inches) Italian style switchblades, with one concealed on the inside lining of his hat, and the other in a hidden on the sheath of his blade. Both a used only for emergency situations. The weapon that Hudson uses the most however is a chinese broadsword, with a blade made from carbonized steel. Interestingly enough, it has a yellowinsh tint to it, which is probably a result of all the energy channeling he's done. The grip and sheathe are inlaid with polymerized oak, while the hilt has an emerald set in the pommel.
Energy Attacks:
The "golden" series of attacks are actually one move. He'll only be able to use the golden gun in the beginning. Luckily enough, the attack will evolve into a new one as he grows stronger. As an example, what was once once the golden bullet, will then become the golden cannon ball, and then finally, the golden rocket.
Golden bullet: Hudson can create and fire a ball of pure energy approximately only 5 centimeters in diameter. The explosion is about 2-3 inches in diameter. Like a revolver, he can fire up to six shots (safely) before running out of energy. Three shots at this stage leave him thoroughly winded, six shots, will leave him on the verge of passing out.
Golden shell: Hudson's golden bullet evolves into the golden cannon which is a ball of energy only 5 inches in diameter. The explosion upon is about 1 foot in diameter. He can create and toss it out of either palm. At this level, he can fire up twelve shots in golden bullet form. He can fire only 6 in golden shell form.
Golden cannon ball (or cannon for short): The final form of the golden shot series, and evolved from the golden shell. The golden rocket is a ball of energy that is about 1 foot in diameter. It is a ball of pure raging destructive force. The explosion from this is at 9 feet in diameter, on the minimum side (What did you expect? It's the final form!). He can create and throw it out of either hand but has to use both hands just (and a fair bit of his strength) to hold it. At this level, (I haven't planned for this to be his maximum level) he can fire three Golden Cannon shots, twelve Golden Shell shots, and twenty-four Golden Bullet shots. Anything over this limit can prove near fatal.
Wild energy: (He doesn't start off being able to do the hardcore stuff though. He gets better as he progresses and grows stronger)
It's both a quirky little ability, and a trait of his energy. When channeling his energy into something (be it his blade or his body), it becomes charged, becoming vastly stronger. He can, however use the ability on others. Unfortunately, it takes a lot more energy out of him. It takes a significantly larger amount of energy to maintain channeled "wild energy" than it does to form a golden bullet. It isn't necessarily the the amount of actual charge he puts into the ability so much as it is the power and energy needed to maintain the charge.
-If golden shell is the only ability, then it lasts (per daily use) up to a maximum of 10 seconds.
-When golden shell becomes available, it lasts about one to two minutes.
-When golden cannon becomes available, it lasts up to ten minutes
As an example, if he Channeled a bit of energy into his legs, he'd be able to leap over a house. And if he channeled energy into his blade, it'd be light as a feather hitting as hard as a 4 ton steel construction beam, it might as well be.
*note: Anything that Hudson channels his wild energy into acquires a yellow, white, or green glow, and stays for as long as hudson has the energy to maintain the charge.
History: Hudson lives in a world that isn't too different from our own. Actually, there are a lot of things from our world that are exactly the same in his. An example would forms of dance a fighting. The style of fashion is predominantly fourties with a hint of the otherworldly. In his world, medical and informational technologies are highly advanced. It compliments the lack of development in industrial technology. One of the main things that makes his world diferent is magic. It's widely accepted, widely known, and even taught to children alongside their ordinary school curriculum.
Every and any human being in the world has the aptitude for magic: except Hudson.
This is a world where those that are weaker with magic are usually demonized, ostracized, and castigated. The only spell that Hudson aqcuired (through years of struggle) was a simple spell for cleaning clothing when it get's dirty. What made things worse was that he was for a while, attending a private school.
You see, Hudson was third in line to the fortune and estate of a wealthy buisness tycoon. He was very well off. But wealth didn't have that pull on him the way it did on the rest of his family. He took up capoeira, he started hanging out with suspicious characters on "the wrong side of the tracks", and even got into fights. He liked the poor infinitely better than the fabulously well off, and for many good reason. In the slums, he didn't put up with discrimination based on his magic aptitude. In the slums, long suffering gave most such bright souls, he and couldn't help but respect and admire them for that.
Years of adventure in the slums helped him learn a lot. B boying and fighting are good examples. There was of course the occasional trouble maker, which was why he boutght a sword with knives from a pawn shop as a "security measure".
He got a bit more serious with his fighting, as delved deeper and deeper into the criminal underground. He entered numerous streetfight and pit fights, moving his new hobby into streetfighting tournaments, duels, and pitfight royales.
He realized that something within him was beginning to bloom. He couldn't tell exactly what it was, but he was certain that it was oceans stronger than anyone else around.
Meanwhile, his father found out about his criminal activities in the slums. That coupled with to social strain of having to feed and shelter a talentless magician of a son caused him to cast Hudson out of the family.
And it was around that time that he discovered what "something" was: his very special energy. The skill and power that he has today is the result of his practice on the road, as he wanders the world to and fro
Name: Hudson Ortusk
Age: 21
Height: 6'1
Weight: 160
Build:Wiry and flexible, yet athletic
Class: Powerhunter (but knows one minor spell for cleaning his clothes)
Description:
Hair- Shaved (used to be curly)
Eyes- a brilliant emerald green
Ethnicity-African American
Skin color- a deep caramel brown
Complexion: Hudson has fairly soft skin. Except for his hands and feet. Both of which being firm and calloused from years of use. Beneath the soft skin however, lies the feel of a fighter, with his hardened muscles (whatever muscle he has) He doesn't have much body hair either. He doesn't know why, but the gods saw fit not to bless him with any facial, chest, leg or forearm hair. He does at the least have (albeit little) hair in the one area that proves tha he's a man.
...And he's still attractive enough to get him into constant trouble with women.
Clothing:
Upper body- A plain white dress shirt, with it's sleeves rolled up past the elbows, and a black pinstriped suit vest.
Head-A black pinstriped fedora. There's a small knife concealed on the inside of his hat.
Legs- Comfortably fitting, black pinstriped suit pants.
Feet- Black pinstriped dress shoes with silk lining and arch support for comfort
Forearms- Steel bracers with a soft leather interior lining.
Misc- Hudson does in fact have the black pinstriped suit coat that came with the rest of the suit. Incidentally, he really only uses it for style, and concealing his blade in public, which is housed in a wooden sheath.
Personality: Hudson's personality is very bubbly (usually depending on how good or energetic he's feeling). He's well-known to be both light-hearted or carefree, and stern, reserved, and taciturn. Though he is greatly appreciative of the better things in both life and us. Necessity has found a home in his heart, as he almost always puts what he needs over what he desires. It's not uncommon of him to shun precious time with friends in order to further sharpen his skills or hone his senses. Deep down, he's a man that wants to gets things done. He thinks that he needs to be strong in order to do that; a reason for the fact that rarely shows sadness, and never cries.
First impression: Hudson is the type of person people usually want to spend a bit more time around (usually). Perhaps it lies in his friendliness? He generally tends to be very good-natured, and very laid-back around strangers. Circumstances for him usually dictate that he's wandering around without a clue, which is something others find a bit amusing. He's a good listener too, and enjoys hearing people's storie. Or perhaps it's that there's more to him than meets the eye? Maybe there's more to him than he himself knows?
He's almost always up for a good laugh, and prepared to look stylish in whatever he does. Though that doesn' t mean that he's afraid of getting messy. One of the things that's he's tried to make a point of is not letting things bother him too much. But that doesn't necessarily say that things don't bother him.
He's genrally a lover of fights and getting stronger, and yet -and here is the interesting part- never goes about picking fights unless he's steamed or deems it necessary.
Fighting Style: Hudson doesn't really use a martial arts style per se, but he does have a way of fighting. Hudson's style emphasizes agility, flexibility, unpredictability, wildness, and strength, though not necessarily in that order. His "style" is more than reminiscent of Capoeira and B-boying. And rightly so, as he's more than dabbled in the above. Strangely enough, he's a spectacular swordsman, combining bladeplay harmoniously with his own hand-to-hand fighting style, though he hasn't had any training with a blade at all. His skills with a blade come from hard-fought battles, necessity, and doing what comes best. Fortunately, he was smart enough to combine them all into his own personal style that he calls Estillo De Reino.
Note: Hudson will only throw or use his switchblades in tight situations.
But make one thing certain: He will always fight for whawt's both right and necessary.
Weapons: Two full-black 5 inch (the blade itself is 4 inches) Italian style switchblades, with one concealed on the inside lining of his hat, and the other in a hidden on the sheath of his blade. Both a used only for emergency situations. The weapon that Hudson uses the most however is a chinese broadsword, with a blade made from carbonized steel. Interestingly enough, it has a yellowinsh tint to it, which is probably a result of all the energy channeling he's done. The grip and sheathe are inlaid with polymerized oak, while the hilt has an emerald set in the pommel.
Energy Attacks:
The "golden" series of attacks are actually one move. He'll only be able to use the golden gun in the beginning. Luckily enough, the attack will evolve into a new one as he grows stronger. As an example, what was once once the golden bullet, will then become the golden cannon ball, and then finally, the golden rocket.
Golden bullet: Hudson can create and fire a ball of pure energy approximately only 5 centimeters in diameter. The explosion is about 2-3 inches in diameter. Like a revolver, he can fire up to six shots (safely) before running out of energy. Three shots at this stage leave him thoroughly winded, six shots, will leave him on the verge of passing out.
Golden shell: Hudson's golden bullet evolves into the golden cannon which is a ball of energy only 5 inches in diameter. The explosion upon is about 1 foot in diameter. He can create and toss it out of either palm. At this level, he can fire up twelve shots in golden bullet form. He can fire only 6 in golden shell form.
Golden cannon ball (or cannon for short): The final form of the golden shot series, and evolved from the golden shell. The golden rocket is a ball of energy that is about 1 foot in diameter. It is a ball of pure raging destructive force. The explosion from this is at 9 feet in diameter, on the minimum side (What did you expect? It's the final form!). He can create and throw it out of either hand but has to use both hands just (and a fair bit of his strength) to hold it. At this level, (I haven't planned for this to be his maximum level) he can fire three Golden Cannon shots, twelve Golden Shell shots, and twenty-four Golden Bullet shots. Anything over this limit can prove near fatal.
Wild energy: (He doesn't start off being able to do the hardcore stuff though. He gets better as he progresses and grows stronger)
It's both a quirky little ability, and a trait of his energy. When channeling his energy into something (be it his blade or his body), it becomes charged, becoming vastly stronger. He can, however use the ability on others. Unfortunately, it takes a lot more energy out of him. It takes a significantly larger amount of energy to maintain channeled "wild energy" than it does to form a golden bullet. It isn't necessarily the the amount of actual charge he puts into the ability so much as it is the power and energy needed to maintain the charge.
-If golden shell is the only ability, then it lasts (per daily use) up to a maximum of 10 seconds.
-When golden shell becomes available, it lasts about one to two minutes.
-When golden cannon becomes available, it lasts up to ten minutes
As an example, if he Channeled a bit of energy into his legs, he'd be able to leap over a house. And if he channeled energy into his blade, it'd be light as a feather hitting as hard as a 4 ton steel construction beam, it might as well be.
*note: Anything that Hudson channels his wild energy into acquires a yellow, white, or green glow, and stays for as long as hudson has the energy to maintain the charge.
History: Hudson lives in a world that isn't too different from our own. Actually, there are a lot of things from our world that are exactly the same in his. An example would forms of dance a fighting. The style of fashion is predominantly fourties with a hint of the otherworldly. In his world, medical and informational technologies are highly advanced. It compliments the lack of development in industrial technology. One of the main things that makes his world diferent is magic. It's widely accepted, widely known, and even taught to children alongside their ordinary school curriculum.
Every and any human being in the world has the aptitude for magic: except Hudson.
This is a world where those that are weaker with magic are usually demonized, ostracized, and castigated. The only spell that Hudson aqcuired (through years of struggle) was a simple spell for cleaning clothing when it get's dirty. What made things worse was that he was for a while, attending a private school.
You see, Hudson was third in line to the fortune and estate of a wealthy buisness tycoon. He was very well off. But wealth didn't have that pull on him the way it did on the rest of his family. He took up capoeira, he started hanging out with suspicious characters on "the wrong side of the tracks", and even got into fights. He liked the poor infinitely better than the fabulously well off, and for many good reason. In the slums, he didn't put up with discrimination based on his magic aptitude. In the slums, long suffering gave most such bright souls, he and couldn't help but respect and admire them for that.
Years of adventure in the slums helped him learn a lot. B boying and fighting are good examples. There was of course the occasional trouble maker, which was why he boutght a sword with knives from a pawn shop as a "security measure".
He got a bit more serious with his fighting, as delved deeper and deeper into the criminal underground. He entered numerous streetfight and pit fights, moving his new hobby into streetfighting tournaments, duels, and pitfight royales.
He realized that something within him was beginning to bloom. He couldn't tell exactly what it was, but he was certain that it was oceans stronger than anyone else around.
Meanwhile, his father found out about his criminal activities in the slums. That coupled with to social strain of having to feed and shelter a talentless magician of a son caused him to cast Hudson out of the family.
And it was around that time that he discovered what "something" was: his very special energy. The skill and power that he has today is the result of his practice on the road, as he wanders the world to and fro
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Okay, I have edited everything you easked for, let me know if there is still anything still missing
@FFGuy
Lookin MUCH better. The personality needs a little more work, but it's approvable. You made it so that some of his actions later on can be discernable by his personality.
I loved the way you classified the 'large' and 'magic' enemies
Good idea. Once again, a little choppy, but approvable.
Weapons: Not approvable, unfortunately. You did much better this time, though there are a few things.
The Ice-results from your mageblade for example. Definitely god-modding. It prevents your foe from moving, attacking, and you can prolong it. Either that skill has to drain all your energy, or you can't use it. Incapacitory effects like that are not good.
The Water-results are also unacceptable, it's impossible to dodge.
Cosmo-results inhibit your opponents ability to attack in a way that's unacceptable. Prohibiting the casting of spells for four minutes? 10 seconds maybe, but anything more than that is way too long.
Magic is OK. Not bad, though you are stretching it with the 1-minute effortless-magic thing
So, for now:
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Just change around the things I've said there. Also, you've gotta improve on the grammar and spelling there. Spelling's not as bad, but the grammar...sorry, but you've definitely gotta work on that
@Serge68
Well then, just tell me when it's ready and I'll look it over.
Lookin MUCH better. The personality needs a little more work, but it's approvable. You made it so that some of his actions later on can be discernable by his personality.
I loved the way you classified the 'large' and 'magic' enemies
Good idea. Once again, a little choppy, but approvable.Weapons: Not approvable, unfortunately. You did much better this time, though there are a few things.
The Ice-results from your mageblade for example. Definitely god-modding. It prevents your foe from moving, attacking, and you can prolong it. Either that skill has to drain all your energy, or you can't use it. Incapacitory effects like that are not good.
The Water-results are also unacceptable, it's impossible to dodge.
Cosmo-results inhibit your opponents ability to attack in a way that's unacceptable. Prohibiting the casting of spells for four minutes? 10 seconds maybe, but anything more than that is way too long.
Magic is OK. Not bad, though you are stretching it with the 1-minute effortless-magic thing
So, for now:
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Just change around the things I've said there. Also, you've gotta improve on the grammar and spelling there. Spelling's not as bad, but the grammar...sorry, but you've definitely gotta work on that
@Serge68
Well then, just tell me when it's ready and I'll look it over.
the water spell I have specified can be dodged if you are currently airborne
as for ice I have said (I think, I will check in a moment) that it lasts a minute if that
so only temporary incapacitation but if the actual spell rather than length is the issue then I will gladly change it
as for ice I have said (I think, I will check in a moment) that it lasts a minute if that
so only temporary incapacitation but if the actual spell rather than length is the issue then I will gladly change it
@FFGuy
Well, that's the stuff I saw. You'll have to check that.
@Serge68
Well, let's get started on this then.
Serge68 - Hudson Ortusk
Love the description. Admittedly, the detail, though not scarce, was a little needy, but I got a clear picture of him. Well done (loved the women part ) You love your pinstripes
Personality's approvable, but a little needy. You could definitely improve on that, but it's ok for now.
Good job on First Impression. Got a clar image of what it would be like to talk to him.
Good Fighting Style. Well done.
Wow. The weapons need a bit more detail. Specify the type of Chinese broadsword, the colours of it, not just the sash.
A little skeptical on the Energy part, with the upkeep of the energy on his blade, legs, etc. How much energy does it take per second, in terms of fractions (i.e. 1/1000 per second of his base energy costs, and stuff like that).
Exellent history. Just update the Energy thing and weapons, and you've got yourself an approved bio NOT APPROVED for now, but just update it, kk?
@Everybody
I'm making a second bio for myself. I'm almost done, I've only gotta finish the history section, and then I'm gonna get it approved by the mods.
Well, that's the stuff I saw. You'll have to check that.
@Serge68
Well, let's get started on this then.
Serge68 - Hudson Ortusk
Love the description. Admittedly, the detail, though not scarce, was a little needy, but I got a clear picture of him. Well done (loved the women part
) You love your pinstripes Personality's approvable, but a little needy. You could definitely improve on that, but it's ok for now.
Good job on First Impression. Got a clar image of what it would be like to talk to him.
Good Fighting Style. Well done.
Wow. The weapons need a bit more detail. Specify the type of Chinese broadsword, the colours of it, not just the sash.
A little skeptical on the Energy part, with the upkeep of the energy on his blade, legs, etc. How much energy does it take per second, in terms of fractions (i.e. 1/1000 per second of his base energy costs, and stuff like that).
Exellent history. Just update the Energy thing and weapons, and you've got yourself an approved bio
NOT APPROVED for now, but just update it, kk?@Everybody
I'm making a second bio for myself. I'm almost done, I've only gotta finish the history section, and then I'm gonna get it approved by the mods.
Hey, Can I Join? Here's my link:
http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/hall-of-warriors/arthvaders-rp-character-10141.html
http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/hall-of-warriors/arthvaders-rp-character-10141.html
Alright Serge, I've looked it over and I say
[APPROVED]
Well done. Does anybody know when this ORPG can get approved for actual RPing?
@Arthvader
Arthvader - Arthvader
Need lots more on Origins/Birthplace. Unknown just don't cut it.
Need a lot more detail on the appearance. Not just what he's wearing on his torso, but also his lower extremities and stuff.
A lot more personality. Two sentences isn't a personality, its a demeanour. If you can't picture it properly, place your character in a number of scenarios, and ask yourself 'what would he do?' That will give you an idea as to his personality, and help you put it into words.
Lots more detail on the weapons needed. Also, re you referring to FF Gilgamesh, or historical Gilgamesh? Remember, these bios don't have to be based on Final Fantasy, they are encouraged to be original. Mine, for example (and at risk of sounding arrogant, though I'm not trying to be) is based on a completely seperate universe from everything that I've heard about (with the exception that it can be similar to DBZ, though still different). I have no problem with it being FF-related, but it's going to be difficult for you to play in our world (though, admittedly, not impossible, you can have your own storyline, as long as it ties in with ours eventually).
In terms of magic, I would have to be pretty harsh here.
I have no problm with the FF-based spells, but rather Megid and Grants. Megid sounds like a one-hit kill. Since it's a one-hit kill, you have to make it EXTREMELY inaccurate. Also, even if it's extremely inaccurate, I can't approve a one-hit kill move. Also, we need a lot more description there as to what it looks like, how quickly it will harm (not kill) the foe, etc.
Grants isn't as bad. You do have to say what it looks like, though. Saying it looks like an FF1 Holy means nothing, as people on here may not know what that looks like. A description of appearance would be required here.
Describe meteor. It seems self explanatory, but it's not. You need a lot of detail there, like how fast it travels, how much energy it takes, how long it takes to hit, if it will destroy the planet, etc.
Also, Pheonix healing is not possible to approve. You sy it heals until it runs out of energy, but how much does it heal. Full heals are unnacceptable. If, for example, it were to place Regen on you, that's different. However, as you have it, it's a full-heal thing, and that just don't bounce.
Also, add in detail to Pheonix's spells. I find it hard to believe that a creature so supremely aligned with fire can cast Ice-magic. Why can he do that? Lots of detail needed here.
Gilgamesh. Describe his weapons. If he has none right now, specify his fighting style. You'll have o do that anyways, as we have no idea how he fights.
Adolfus is unacceptable. Period. No time-stopping allowed, especially for extremely long spans like 5 minutes. That could give you time to go up and slit their throats, killing them instantly. A 5-second stop isn't bad, as long as you are several ten-feet away from your opponent.
Right now, totally
[NOT APPROVED]
Change it up, and I'll look at it again.
[APPROVED]
Well done. Does anybody know when this ORPG can get approved for actual RPing?
@Arthvader
Arthvader - Arthvader
Need lots more on Origins/Birthplace. Unknown just don't cut it.
Need a lot more detail on the appearance. Not just what he's wearing on his torso, but also his lower extremities and stuff.
A lot more personality. Two sentences isn't a personality, its a demeanour. If you can't picture it properly, place your character in a number of scenarios, and ask yourself 'what would he do?' That will give you an idea as to his personality, and help you put it into words.
Lots more detail on the weapons needed. Also, re you referring to FF Gilgamesh, or historical Gilgamesh? Remember, these bios don't have to be based on Final Fantasy, they are encouraged to be original. Mine, for example (and at risk of sounding arrogant, though I'm not trying to be) is based on a completely seperate universe from everything that I've heard about (with the exception that it can be similar to DBZ, though still different). I have no problem with it being FF-related, but it's going to be difficult for you to play in our world (though, admittedly, not impossible, you can have your own storyline, as long as it ties in with ours eventually).
In terms of magic, I would have to be pretty harsh here.
I have no problm with the FF-based spells, but rather Megid and Grants. Megid sounds like a one-hit kill. Since it's a one-hit kill, you have to make it EXTREMELY inaccurate. Also, even if it's extremely inaccurate, I can't approve a one-hit kill move. Also, we need a lot more description there as to what it looks like, how quickly it will harm (not kill) the foe, etc.
Grants isn't as bad. You do have to say what it looks like, though. Saying it looks like an FF1 Holy means nothing, as people on here may not know what that looks like. A description of appearance would be required here.
Describe meteor. It seems self explanatory, but it's not. You need a lot of detail there, like how fast it travels, how much energy it takes, how long it takes to hit, if it will destroy the planet, etc.
Also, Pheonix healing is not possible to approve. You sy it heals until it runs out of energy, but how much does it heal. Full heals are unnacceptable. If, for example, it were to place Regen on you, that's different. However, as you have it, it's a full-heal thing, and that just don't bounce.
Also, add in detail to Pheonix's spells. I find it hard to believe that a creature so supremely aligned with fire can cast Ice-magic. Why can he do that? Lots of detail needed here.
Gilgamesh. Describe his weapons. If he has none right now, specify his fighting style. You'll have o do that anyways, as we have no idea how he fights.
Adolfus is unacceptable. Period. No time-stopping allowed, especially for extremely long spans like 5 minutes. That could give you time to go up and slit their throats, killing them instantly. A 5-second stop isn't bad, as long as you are several ten-feet away from your opponent.
Right now, totally
[NOT APPROVED]
Change it up, and I'll look at it again.
I will as my character goes on during other RPs.
...since when do RPGs need to be approved? I wasn't made aware of this.
Oh! I thought they did Well, then I shall start it up as soon as FFGuy and Vader get their bios up and running. Or do you guys want me to start it up now?
Also, I've got a new bio up in my Bio Thread, Hera Ledro's Family. Anybody wanna read up Jacob Luke King? Give me a critique, etc. If a mod decides to read it, can it be approved?
Well, then I shall start it up as soon as FFGuy and Vader get their bios up and running. Or do you guys want me to start it up now?Also, I've got a new bio up in my Bio Thread, Hera Ledro's Family. Anybody wanna read up Jacob Luke King? Give me a critique, etc. If a mod decides to read it, can it be approved?
I guess you can count me out then, as I'm currently in many other RPs.
well, arth saving you dropping out why not paste your rp bio in here and edit it as needed,that way it does not affect your other rps
EDIT: I have checked for spelling and additional punctuation while going through my spells again, give it a check and fire at will
EDIT: I have checked for spelling and additional punctuation while going through my spells again, give it a check and fire at will
@FFGuy
MUCH better grammar.
Excellent! Well done with repairing the weapons skills.
I say [APPROVED]
Well done FFGuy. Much better. Since this is an ORPG, I'll take it a little easy on certain details, so well done. Not one that I'd approve for RPBing, but for ORPGs, it's ok.
MUCH better grammar.
Excellent! Well done with repairing the weapons skills.
I say [APPROVED]
Well done FFGuy. Much better. Since this is an ORPG, I'll take it a little easy on certain details, so well done. Not one that I'd approve for RPBing, but for ORPGs, it's ok.